Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

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Some people think that family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence in young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.

Although a lot of people strongly believe that youth adults are more influenced by family, it seems to me that since juveniles spent most of their times with friends, they are much more effectual in training of them due to time extension they pass with together and importance of companionship in every relationship on which next paragraphs will suggest the basis of my view.

To begin with, “repetitive daily woks during day will show genuine characteristic of individuals”, philosopher of 375 to 322 century, Plato said. According to such valuable statement, our habits forms during times in which we repeat especial behaviors. The more extension of these interval times, the more consistence of formed traits. Either appropriate manners can fix through human, or malign habits behave similarly. For example, when juveniles spent leisure times with friends, they shared their pleasures with them to such a point that learning of various personalities can transport at such enjoyable moments; they imitate and finally resemble with each other. Provided that youth adults follow according their wisdom, they can copy praiseworthy manners; however, countless straight persons who seduced by bad companionship.

Additionally, however much parents sensitize about their children’s friends, they ultimately release to the society and meet whoever they confront with. Had parents trained their children as best as it’s possible, they would have lived in the society by much more relief; however, this notion cannot be definite. Relying to God at the first stage, training fruits on the basis of wisdom, and learning them to choose the best person as friend all are of the measurements on which parents should grow children simply because they will not be with them for their life long.

All in all, to put the issue into a nut shell, friends as the most determinant persons for juvenile’s future should select by obsession.

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our habits form during times

countless straight persons who seduced by bad companionship.
countless straight persons who are seduced by bad companionship.

should select by obsession.
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