TV is an essential part of leisure activities in most families. However, some parents decide not to have TV set in their house, so that their children will devote enough time to invention and creation. Do you agree or disagree with this attitude?
With the advent of tremendous Knowledge and diversity information, the appearance of TV, one of the most magnificent inventions, enormously change our leisure life’s style, and it is conceivably that people sitting front of the TV can receive lots of entertainment and joy easily. Nevertheless, watching television on a long period of time could bring the disadvantage not only mentally but also physically.
Contemporary TV program has been filled with vulgar gossip and abundant of misleading information. People who run on the TV business intends to attract audiences and earn money, trades gossip and ribald TV show for ratings increasing, which behavior would damage our children’s mentally growth. Besides, some person who addicted on the TV world, would not leave the chair to take outside exercise or do communicate with people. Immersing the refined TV world, people’s physicalness and social skill will be degenerated.
On the other side, utilizing modern tool with right way, TV can bring many of benefits to our daily live. Contemporary people, surviving in this competitive world, could be relieved from some humorous TV show. Furthermore, the positive program, such as nightly news, not only saving our time to categorize but also organize the news taken place during our working time, helping us to absorb it very quick, in addition, some witty carton which attracting to our kids help their creative and imagination growth.
Therefore, for my opinion, choosing the educative program for children and inspiring show for us is more important than decide the TV set. If not, find another way to cultivate their minds and creative.
Sentence: With the advent of tremendous Knowledge and diversity information, the appearance of TV, one of the most magnificent inventions, enormously change our leisure life's style, and it is conceivably that people sitting front of the TV can receive lots of entertainment and joy easily.
Description: The fragment is conceivably that is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace conceivably with adjective
Sentence: Furthermore, the positive program, such as nightly news, not only saving our time to categorize but also organize the news taken place during our working time, helping us to absorb it very quick, in addition, some witty carton which attracting to our kids help their creative and imagination growth.
Description: A WH-determiner is not usually followed by a verb, present participle or gerund
Suggestion: Refer to which and attracting
Sentence: Therefore, for my opinion, choosing the educative program for children and inspiring show for us is more important than decide the TV set.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to than and decide
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