What famous place would you like to visit Use details and reasons to support your response

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What famous place would you like to visit? Use details and reasons to support your response.

There are lots of famous places in the world which are exotic; lots of cosmopolitan cities and lots of far away and exquisite places worth a visit. So it’s really hard to make a choice. But if I have to make a distinct choice I’d prefer to visit Venice due to a host of reasons.

Firstly I've never been in Venice but I’ve heard a lot through tourists about Venice, a city on water, riding in gondolas, buying goods on water, having bus rides on water and a unique culture and architecture. I've browsed many websites and I've seen lots of photos and visiting Venice has been always one of my dreams. I surmise it’s an ideal place for fun seekers and a heaven for lovers.

Secondly one of my close and congenial friends lives there. I haven’t seen her since 2 years ago; hence if I go to Venice I can visit her and we can spend time together. Also she can take me to visit Venice and she’ll accompany me and definitely that’s a pleasure for me and makes this travel more tempting and appealing.

Moreover Italian cuisine is famous across the world and I’ve heard a lot about Italian foods. I’ve tried some of their foods and it seems that foods are palatable to me. Italian pizzas are unique in the world and they are really different.

All in all, Venice is a land of glory and glamour and surely it has its own lures and charms. Presence of my friend in there can make this city an awesome place to rest my mind and body. Moreover Italian cuisine is favorable by me. Due to these reasons I know that traveling to Venice might be enjoyable and desirable.

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Sentence: There are lots of famous places in the world which are exotic; lots of cosmopolitan cities and lots of far away and exquisite places worth a visit.
Description: The fragment far away and is rare

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1247 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.157 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.191 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 78 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.074 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Q: No. of Different Words: 157 200 , you mean i should use 200 different words but I've used only 157 ?

A: Yes. Put more content if possible. Better to have 350 words. Look, the paragraphs are short:

Moreover Italian cuisine is famous across the world and I’ve heard a lot about Italian foods. I’ve tried some of their foods and it seems that foods are palatable to me. Italian pizzas are unique in the world and they are really different.

Q: Moreover what's my grammatical error in this essay?

A: There is only one grammar error:
Description: The fragment 'far away and' is rare