Do you agree or disagree "we should pay attention to the opinions of famous people"?

Many people believe that the speed of the changing of this world is very fast hence, they are less happy and are not satisfied with their lives. I agree with this opinion and I think people in the past had simpler lives, however, they were satisfied with their lives and were happier than today's people. Because nowadays people have to work hard and have less time for spending with their family and friends, finally, they should keep themselves update about the science and technology.
At this time, people always have to work hard to earn enough money for living in this world. The technology and new devices are proceeding quickly, people, in order to buy these new inventions and devices, need money, hence they work hard. For instance, whenever a new Ipad come out, many people voraciously save their moneys and work harder to buy that. Therefore, they will be tired of working and consequently, will be less happy.
My second reason is that because of the quick changes of this world, many people do not have constant friends. Therefore they are usually alone and do not spend enough time with their families and friends and overwhelm at work. Consequently, they are less happy, however in the past people were less busy and had simple lives, but they spent a lot of time with their families hence, they were happier.
Meanwhile, people should keep their knowledge update and because the science progress quickly, hence they will have stress. If people want to be successful in their fields, they have to keep their knowledge update. On the other hand, the technology and science in the world are proceeding very quickly, hence people would be stress-full and will not be satisfied with their lives. However in the past, the technology and science proceeding were very slow hence, people did not need to learn a lot of things constantly.
In conclusion, in my view, people are less happy and less satisfied with their lives, because the world changes very quickly and they are trying to compete with these changes. It is better for them to keep calm and accept these changes instead of competing with them.

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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...will not be satisfied with their lives. However in the past, the technology and science...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84022038567 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26803254989 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438016528926 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8307687239 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.8125 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0811693925925 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036511349353 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0252671296484 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0530099379287 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02556400258 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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