In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together. Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?

In multiculturalism, people from different geographical background engage with each others. As per my opinion, benefits of multi-culture societies outweigh the drawbacks.

To begin with, certain people observe culture shock when they migrate to another place which is totally different from their native region. There are certain differences on language, clothing, religion, eating habits and ethics which can not be resolved at any cost. Besides, people without any research absorb different culture values from other communities and at the end underestimate their own culture.

On the other si...

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Sentence: In multiculturalism, people from different geographical background engage with each others.
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diversity in culture values provide us chance
diversity ... provides us chance

It is also essential requirement
It is also an essential requirement

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