People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
At the 20th and 21st centuries, with the development of human’s modern society, more and more people tend to work hardly. There is no doubt that one of the most significant reasons of working is accumulating a horde of money to experience independent life. Actually, people’s attitudes toward the reasons for working are widely varied from person to person. In my vantage point, developing social skills as well as improving self-esteem motivates people to work.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to choose a job is improving their social skills. As a matter of fact, human being is by nature gregarious. It is crystal-clear that in a workplace, people can get familiar with different person who has diverse viewpoints; also, they can make new friends, spend time with each other and share their ideas. Consider companies which provide some opportunities for its employees to travel abroad for mission. Not only can they broaden their horizon by socializing with experts, but also they can cement their relationship with their friends during the expedition. To illustrate more, even at the beginning of the trip in order to shed their fears of being in an airplane for example, they can start a conversation with their colleagues and discuss how they can seize opportunities that are provided for company in the competitive market or how they can make headway in a long run. Therefore, they can fortify their social skills by working.
Another subtle point is that people can fortify their self-esteem through working. Undoubtedly, in today modern world with its galloping progress, jobs are being specialized and complicated so much so that everyone in charge of a particular job should enjoy a great amount of experience in that field, so working provides an opportunity for people to prove their abilities and feel pleased with themselves. According to recent research conducted in my country, psychologists are in the conviction that person who works 40 hours in a week are by far more confident than unemployed person. In my own experience, when I graduated from university I could not find a job for 2 years and I had difficult times in that period of time, because I felt that I was an useless person for my society; however, being hired in a company can effectively boosted my moral, and I little by little learned how to struggle for my dreams. That is to say, the sense of accomplishment which is gained from making progress in job can raise their self-esteem.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'no doubt', 'as a matter of fact', 'as well as', 'that is to say']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209850107066 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.160599571734 0.158761421928 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0792291220557 0.0866891130778 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051391862955 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0728051391863 0.0685040099705 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147751605996 0.118717715034 124% => OK
Participles: 0.051391862955 0.0351676179071 146% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87537338599 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0278372591006 0.0309702414327 90% => OK
Particles: 0.00214132762313 0.00188951952338 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.06852248394 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0278372591006 0.0209618222197 133% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0214132762313 0.0139019557991 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2509.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 420.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97380952381 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.354761904762 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.252380952381 0.251872472559 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.183333333333 0.174417080927 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135714285714 0.112833075102 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87537338599 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 63.5604223051 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 26.25 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.0252094573 48.84282405 180% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 156.8125 120.699889404 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 51.4880952381 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.43609022556 1.45489161554 99% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253530962172 0.300154397459 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.125663573901 0.103427244359 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0914525222067 0.0752933317313 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.472014645857 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148754146671 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101110308466 0.114077575197 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538921759048 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.353411427642 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0687642600412 0.067059652881 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206278540985 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744991419058 0.0618886996521 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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