People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
The writer of the issue contends that it is not us who make decisions about how we will behave, but our behavior is fundamentally influenced by other people. This is a contentious issue; some agree with this claim and some refute it. While each side has its strengths and weaknesses, I believe that this argue is largely true because our behavior is in fact reactions to other people conducts, and the standards which according to them we behave are set by society. Furthermore, one of the main criteria of every behavior is the consequence of it, and that is something which greatly depends to other people. In what follows these reasons would be delineated.
First, each action and behavior that we show is in fact a reaction to some stimuli from outside. Our conducts are our responses to world around us. For example, our angry words could be a reaction to some misconduct from people whom we are faced. Moreover, every one of us had set of guidelines and standards for good behavior. We are always trying to live and work according to this codex. But how these rules and instruction were chosen? The answer is simple. Outside world. It was our parents, our teachers, our friends or our bosses who choosed them for us. So, given the importance of these rules and persons who put them in the place, I can say we behave under the influence of others
Another reason which has great effect on our behavior is the consequence of them. For many of us, the only obstacle for doing something like taking whatever we want from a store or bank is the consequence of definite punishment. The perspective of loosing something or gaining a profit is a strong motivation to behave in certain way. Hence, you can see that these consequence, which in quit possible in all cases are implemented by other people, are very important criteria for our behavior.
As was stated already, there are some others who believe that it is not true, and it is us who determine our behavior. They probably would say that each person is master of its own universe and can have complete autonomy in his behavior. This point is flawed, since we do not live alone in the universe. Nobody can say that it my world, and mine alone. The behavior when will gain meaning that is in communication with others. When other people are added to this equation then we lose the factor of independence and every thing will have effect on the other ones and will gain influences of them.
We can summarize that behavior is in fact a reactions to the conducts of other people and to the standards which have been set by these people. Moreover, a vital criterion of behavior is its results which greatly depend to other people. So, we can conclude that human behavior is greatly influenced by others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: NOT_US1[1]
Message: Did you mean 'use'?
Suggestion: use
...er of the issue contends that it is not us who make decisions about how we will be...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this consequence' or 'these consequences'?
Suggestion: this consequence; these consequences
...in certain way. Hence, you can see that these consequence, which in quit possible in all cases ar...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a reaction' or simply 'reactions'?
Suggestion: a reaction; reactions
... can summarize that behavior is in fact a reactions to the conducts of other people and to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in fact, in all cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 33.0505617978 221% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65368852459 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53613283024 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46106557377 0.4932671777 93% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.30271755 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3461538462 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7692307692 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114694037497 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337787969585 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350391920002 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772513837468 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307209107782 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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