TPO41-W2, Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.
With the growing attention to the quality of education and the nationwide compulsory education, teachers are playing a more and more significant role in our society. Schools which possess famous teachers are popular, and parents even spend a great deal of money buying houses nearby the famous schools in order to provide their children a better education. However, the social appreciation to teachers are different. News that some teacher uses corporal punishment to their students is always heard, which rises the public worry about the teaching method that teachers use. On the other hand, teacher are facing increasing pressure from schools, parents and students. Nowadays teachers are less appreciated and valued by public. In my opinion, there are several reasons for this situation.
First of all, parents are in a higher position than teachers in our modern society, for being educated is not receiving a gift from teachers anymore, but buying a service from school. In the ancient time when schools are called “si shu”, education is unaffordable for most of people, but the only way for a poor family to get a better life was imperial examination. If they had a chance to get educated, they would regard it as a gift. In the early time of PRC, people are less educated while there were few teachers, so teachers were high valued at that time. Today, receiving education becomes duty, so parents start to regard it as a service. In addition, it is known to all that schools, family and society together play an important role in education, while today all responsibility fall to teachers’ hands. When kids are naughty and have bad manner, people tend to blame teachers in spite of their own fault. So the parents’ wrong opinion to education makes teacher less appreciated.
On the other side, teachers are different from the old time. In ancient time, the teacher in the “si shu” was the most knowledgeable and noblest person among the village. And in the early time of the PRC, teachers still possessed most of the knowledge. They studied abroad and brought back latest method. Today teachers are more likely to just make a living. Teacher becomes a job which is no more different than other careers. Moreover, the number of teachers becomes so large, which contains lots of inexperienced teachers. They lack efficient method to make their student study better and restrict them, and finally use the extreme method such as corporal punishment, which decrease the social appreciation to teachers.
To sum it all, both our society and teachers are responsible for the low evaluation of teachers. I believe that our society needs more understanding, and teacher should improve themselves. So that we can change this situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...hu', education is unaffordable for most of people, but the only way for a poor family to ...
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Line 5, column 419, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...ecomes a job which is no more different than other careers. Moreover, the number of ...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... and teacher should improve themselves. So that we can change this situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, in addition, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11920529801 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70560939681 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518763796909 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3782047121 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1923076923 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4230769231 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24785212094 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764205485178 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565366838457 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159771686681 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013673086948 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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