01/10/2017
Nowadays many parents believe that children’s usage of tablets or computers would be good for their future academic career. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such belief?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Many claim offspring’s usage of computer technologies may be beneficial for their academic career in the future. Below drawbacks and merits of this belief will be discussed in details.
On the one hand, there are some disadvantages. Firstly, parents who assume their progeny will benefit from using computers in the college could allow them to spend too much time in front of a screen. Staring for hours at a monitor will likely have an adverse impact on their sight; moreover, inactive lifestyle will undermine kids' over-all health. Secondly, parents who think spending time on the internet would bring the young people advantages while pursuing a degree could not pay needed attention to the academic performance of the kinds. Consequently, a child who has not developed yet a will and the ability to control whims will probably neglect to study; and thus, his average will inevitably decline. Those are major drawbacks of the discussed issue.
On the other hand, the belief could bring some fruits. Primarily, the world of tomorrow is going to be highly computerized and many if not all activities from entertainment to fulfilment of work duties will be routinely done with usage of computers. Those who get used to the technology since early childhood would have an indispensable advantage over those who did not play with the machines during the formative years. Furthermore, spending time on playing computer games and hanging out in social media has become a new norm. Thus, socializing, making novel friends and developing communicative skills requires from a kid to devote a great deal of his life to looking at a laptop or tablet screen. Adhering to the belief by mothers and fathers will let the youngsters have a normal, modern life. So, above some plausible merits of the trend were mentioned.
In conclusion, the idea kids will benefit in the future from knowing computers has some positive and negative facets that are logical consequences of one another.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Primarily, the world of tomorrow is going to be highly computerized and many if not all activities from entertainment to fulfilment of work duties will be routinely done with usage of computers.
Error: fulfilment Suggestion: fulfillment
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flaws:
Auxiliary verbs are over used, like: could, would, may,
the solutions is: ignore them, for example:
Many claim offspring’s usage of computer technologies may be beneficial for their academic career in the future.
advised:
Many claim offspring’s usage of computer technologies will benefit their academic careers in the future.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.975 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.649 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.445 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.474 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.021 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Yes, it is wrong. 'moderate'
Yes, it is wrong. 'moderate' also means don't over use something. One or two times are enough. Or more general rules:
Don't repeat anything if possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many claims'.
Suggestion: Many claims
Many claim offspring's usage of computer tech...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13271604938 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77689114794 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604938271605 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9503594189 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9375 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4375 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157304121142 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500863359336 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668918782397 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115817459412 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828749452177 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.