"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
In order to save the decline of listener numbers, the passage says that WWAC should change the rock-music format that already had in the radio station to news and talk format for increasing the listener and serving the residents who recently move in to the listening area for their retirement life. But I think this argument is unconvincing.
First, the decline contributing to the rock-music format, article argues, is problematic. The music that the radio provide may be totally obsolete, causing the listener feeling bored to hear them again. Maybe, the younger listeners are not familiar with the old-school rock music, further losing their attention, a problem coming for the music's content instead of the format. For example, it is rare to hear about Linkin Park during the 21 century, and it is not to mention whether listeners are familiar with Guns N' Roses.
Second, because the local sales of recorded music implied the decline of listener, the argument claims, the radio station should get rid of the music format. However, in this era, the 21 century, music entertainment can be satisfied on the internet, so the decline in the local sales may be derived from the increase of click rate of the media on the internet. I spend a lot of time searching for music on YouTube and listen the music in front of computer rather than radio, weakening the assumption of the decline of local sales.
Third, the article assumes that introducing the news and talks shows for all the retired people moving into the listening area can brings the increase of listener numbers. However, this conclusion is racism. Retired people have their individual personalities and interests. Some like news, some like farming teaching talks, some like culinary course, but still some like rock music. If the retired people were DJs severing WWAC for two decades, they may be highly willing to listen rock music from the radio for enjoying their tea time.
- Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. 50
- To reverse a decline in listener numbers our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock music format The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here 71
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1572 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.387 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.278 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 132, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...ople moving into the listening area can brings the increase of listener numbers. Howev...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 538, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the radio for enjoying their tea time.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00615384615 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48020613764 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535384615385 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9166401928 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.214285714 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252232418452 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893275812922 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619673292847 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168609977538 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296837549689 0.0628817314937 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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