The reading passage asserts that the vice president proposes electronic inspection over employees to enhance their performances and the productivity of the overall company. However, the ideas and reasons presented in the reading are not convincing and laid upon unsubstantiated groundwork and in what follows the most compelling controversies are drawn.
First, the passage claims that electronic supervision would show internet usage if an employee consumes his/her time doing personal activities or not. Nonetheless, the author does not provide any reasons of how is it possible to differ between personal and non-personal usage. In this regard, there are plenty of applications in which update themselves automatically. Imagine an employee who wants to work with internet, at this time he is working on his/her duty on web-browser and the inspector can see whatever the employee see. However, some applications suddenly start to update themselves and neither the employee nor the inspector can understand this phenomenon. Accordingly, since windows update usually ran large amount of traffic data, at the end of the day, the vice president imagines that personal usage was the main cause of this event. Hence, finding the source of internet usage, to be intentionally and unintentionally is not applicable.
Second, the author in the argument says that, the preferred application can observe all working-hours. On the contrary, there are many fraudulent plan that a person can get rid of inspector application; for instance, installing new sneaky and stealthy application such as IDM-internet download manager- or OPERA, which could start to download specific application in an scheduled time. Imagine that an employee wants to go for lunch hour, and schedules one sneaky application to start download his/her favorites in that time. So, the application cannot understand any changes on the screen while the files are downloading. Hence, even though the implementation of some application may help to inspect an employee, but there are other application in which facilitate people to unethical favorites.
Third, the vice president in the argument did not address monetary matter of the company and also true definition of productivity. Indeed, inspectional application are one of the most expensive applications in which the company should consider. In this regard, this applications usually should be paid monthly and since the overall number of subscribers are high, they should include this expenses too. Also, it is commonly conceived that the productivity of people can be raised by having leisure time around 10 minutes for every 50 minutes. Therefore, the company cannot increase the productivity of its employees by data traffic limitation and also should evaluate the expenses of inspectional application.
In conclusion, as the above-mentioned examples have illustrated, the author's arguments cannot be accepted because, it depends on a number of premises each of which laid on shallow foundation and is questionable. Hence, to make the argument unblemished, the uncertainties and unambiguousness of the argument should be acknowledged.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 482 350
No. of Characters: 2612 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.686 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.419 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.121 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 82 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.952 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.054 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'plans'?
Suggestion: plans
...the contrary, there are many fraudulent plan that a person can get rid of inspector ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...art to download specific application in an scheduled time. Imagine that an employe...
^^
Line 4, column 262, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ompany should consider. In this regard, this applications usually should be paid mon...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, third, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2678.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59081419624 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19557597963 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524008350731 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 844.2 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2394063153 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.523809524 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13049857633 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406175338474 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347579050523 0.0701772020484 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701825285087 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336690408097 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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