the graph below shows the demand for the electricity in English during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and ma

The pie chart demonstrates how people in England use electricity at home.The graph compares winter and summer in turn of the amount of electricity is consumed in a typical day.

Overall, the consumption of electricity in winter is much more than that in summer, among mainly be used for heating rooms and heating water.

The trends of daily consumption of electricity are different in winter, which fluctuates between 30000 units to 50000 units and in summer ,which remains relatively steady at 10000 units to 20000 units. However, the demands for electricity are increase at afternoon from 12 o'clock to 3 o'clock and at night around 9 to 10 o'clock in the both seasons.

From the pie chart , we can see that at 52.5%, heating rooms, heating water accounted for the majority of electricity consuming. Following by using kitchen utensils at 17.5%. The last are lighting, TV, radio as well as vacuum cleaners, food mixers, electric tools, both categories are at 15% of total.

Votes
Average: 7 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.304568527919 0.268076937826 114% => OK
Verbs: 0.116751269036 0.116061578633 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0507614213198 0.0759168565197 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355329949239 0.0366838410393 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00507614213198 0.0131127313244 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.162436548223 0.155750635184 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0456852791878 0.0379272487307 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87424174622 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0203045685279 0.0210936926555 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0710659898477 0.0948980150116 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00507614213198 0.00437022459523 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0152284263959 0.00967000014798 157% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1001.0 1161.00487805 86% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.9 83% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10365853659 5.90752243213 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73763899035 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390243902439 0.337110787985 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.280487804878 0.247514529752 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201219512195 0.171178102325 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134146341463 0.112407865282 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87424174622 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634146341463 0.546246751206 116% => OK
Word variations: 59.6157440485 49.3433353143 121% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 8.93414634146 78% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4285714286 23.0094962315 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0354787759 42.9750493124 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 135.714022679 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 23.0094962315 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.689975730869 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.48048780488 270% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.4773519164 47.7609492067 108% => OK
Elegance: 3.25806451613 2.94281807926 111% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430825036957 0.418131533498 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128794870939 0.181151798455 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0931679291512 0.0850326197045 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.706916605154 0.706616315825 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.223773534063 0.157042692854 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.218425961184 0.228904883108 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151993653197 0.108899403657 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.241886766971 0.367819155151 66% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0583868520277 0.0812612215331 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31459684844 0.316326947829 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126526769687 0.0921553760075 137% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70731707317 54% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.08536585366 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.16585365854 63% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.02926829268 165% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 7.1512195122 98% => OK

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 6.0 Out of 9