You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays.You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter:•introduce yourself•explain what experie

Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing this letter to apply for holiday job posting which has been advertised in daily Newspaper. I am a 24-year-old student, studying my bachelor degree in Cambridge University. Though I am from one of the South East countries, I do speak English fluently. At present, I am very keen to have a holiday job this summer.
My term finishes on 5 July and I am free until 20 September. Last year I had worked in a restaurant as a servant and I got a chance to meet the people all over the world. That was a fascinating experience. This year I would like to expand my wings, looking have a more interesting and satisfying job. I would say, working in a museum might give a chance for me to explore more about the history and meet the different ethnic groups.
I enjoy going into the museums and am particularly keen on history. I have been in your museum several times and I am familiar with the historical objects and Heritage of the museum. I do hope you will be interested in my application.
I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Yours faithfully,
Dimitris Boudramis

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y and meet the different ethnic groups. I enjoy going into the museums and am pa...
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Line 4, column 69, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ms and am particularly keen on history. I have been in your museum several times ...
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Line 4, column 184, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cal objects and Heritage of the museum. I do hope you will be interested in my ap...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... will be interested in my application. I look forward to hearing from you in the...
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Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Yours faithfully, Dimitris Boudramis
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 914.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 203.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50246305419 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77462671648 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76310332488 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625615763547 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 1.53170731707 849% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2736667412 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.2857142857 112.824112599 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.5 22.9334400587 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 5.23603664747 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207898024442 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605688705936 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547149655526 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110852440997 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035646937967 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 13.2329268293 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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