Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education Or is it the responsi | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic.

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence.

It is often argued that developed countries should contribute in the progression of third world nations with financial and educational aids. While, some people opine that it is mere the responsibility of administration of poor nations to thinkabout the betterment of their citizens. However, I believe, it would be fruitful if wealthy nations, actively participate for the upliftment of under developed countries.
To commence with, they can contribute by providing adequate educational support to poor nations. As, Education is solely the mean that can bring changes in the ways of living and to generate employement sources. Educational support such as training camps can help people to know about the strategies, essential to run any business,could definitely benefit the poor nation to rise . For example, America, a developed nation, is providing fully funded scholarships to many overseas students especially coming from poor nations for studying, which not only educates them but also they can implement those education in their nation's progression.Hence, educational support help to decrease the illteracy rate and brings a positive change in destitute's lives.
Moreover, ceratin financial and medical aid can also lead to development of underdeveloped nations. Due to lack of funds , there are no treatments of the diseases , no medicines to combat with the health issues, which further leads to increase the mortality rate in nation . So, medical aid from developed countries like health camps, vaccines and new medical techniques, probably can help the nations to overcome this situation in coming future. Furthermore, also decrease in the prices of exported food items can make people able to buy food products and make themselves healthy .
To conclude, it is clear that, particiaption of first world nations in uplifting the poor nations is absolutely necessary to bring that out from scratch which only be done by providing financial as well as educational support.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, third, well, while, for example, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48852459016 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08015702939 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580327868852 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5500504697 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4166666667 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243605276499 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911359462486 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557339222075 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153049952752 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042908243117 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, third, well, while, for example, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments