In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Of late in several nations, a trend has been begun and the young people are advocated to take a gap of year after finishing high school and starting university studies. While this offers a few advantages, there are also some disadvantages, which are worth considering.
There are two main benefits for the students who are decided to work or travel before starting their university studies. Firstly, students decided to travel will expose to new culture and environment and this will expand their horizons. Thus, they will gain a deeper understanding of the world and they can get an idea how economy play a key role in building the world. Second, students can gain the money if they choose to work after the high school. This would help them to stand financially independent and fund on their own for university studies. In addition to the money, students get a chance to demonstrate the skills earned in high school in their work.
On the other hand, various drawbacks may be noted. In the first place, people may get homesick because of the travelling and it may cause some depression. On top of that, this could be the first time a student is travelling alone. Thus, he may take some time to communicate with the new culture people and understand the surroundings of the new place. Additionally, students who started to work may not want to return their studies because they are already earning the money. Therefore, their whole future could be negatively affected, as these days it is very important for everyone to graduate with a degree in order to be competitive in the job market.
In convulsion, if students take a year gap, they could learn imperative experience and learn to financially independent. However, they may also become homesick and end up not continuing their studies. Therefore, it is necessary to weigh the benefits against the drawbacks carefully before coming to a decision as to whether students should go on such an adventure.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, in the first place, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90662650602 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73774304345 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521084337349 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0541131247 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8235294118 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262056476168 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835476897864 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832783450394 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1572303557 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918214548414 0.056905535591 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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