Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Despite the fact that the art has been an imperative part of the human civilization, some believe that introducing art related subjects in academic curriculum is not worthy and academic subjects are more important. However, others believe these subjects are vital due to its contribution towards the development of the mankind throughout the history.

There is a belief that subjects like science, technology, history and mathematics are more important to learn for two main reasons. The first point to make is that in this era of modernization and automation, it is quiet necessary for pupils to be upgraded with the knowledge of the latest technology and research. For instance, if you are not a computer literate, you cannot cope up with the today’s contemporary lifestyle. Secondly, for job prospects, these are far more appealing than other co-curricular ones. For example, any employer would select the candidate having computer and current affairs related knowledge than the one who can create a nice painting. Thus, to keep pace with these advancements, these core subjects are more significant.

Nevertheless, it seems to me that traditional subjects are equally important for overall development of the child. Firstly, from these subjects, they can learn about not only the culture and the civilization but also the preservation of the heritage. For example, if they know how to read the musical notations, they could learn about the historical culture through the songs written by musicians. Secondly, some researchers have proved some artistic skills can become the great aid to cure mental and physical diseases which are proved incurable by medical science. For instance, it has been proved that music therapy is well known for healing some maladies. Thus, arts related subjects are crucial for flourishing individual.

In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, I believe that arts related subject should be vital and compulsory in primary schooling and could be made optional at secondary or tertiary education.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217032967033 0.247107183377 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.151098901099 0.155533422707 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112637362637 0.0946595960268 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0604395604396 0.0501214627716 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0302197802198 0.0437548338989 69% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123626373626 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.043956043956 0.0403226058552 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91136107372 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021978021978 0.0326793684256 67% => OK
Particles: 0.00274725274725 0.00163938923432 168% => OK
Determiners: 0.104395604396 0.0861772015684 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021978021978 0.021408717616 103% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010989010989 0.011925033212 92% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2064.0 1933.35771543 107% => OK
No of words: 322.0 316.048096192 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.4099378882 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20517956788 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391304347826 0.374742101984 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.33850931677 0.28420135186 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257763975155 0.203846283523 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.173913043478 0.137316102897 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91136107372 2.80594681477 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.037074148 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.56093040696 105% => OK
Word variations: 66.0560366405 60.7387585426 109% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4666666667 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6239485706 49.517814964 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.6 127.492653851 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 55.3175983437 49.1944974215 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.59090909091 1.69124875643 94% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169746955569 0.332605444948 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113793350797 0.102741220458 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.081292501476 0.0668466124924 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518164434446 0.534860350844 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.192331595319 0.148594505496 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713110499721 0.134430193775 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580715383568 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.285833338973 0.324371583561 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.153095505263 0.0638462369009 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120155945155 0.228012699653 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00703407180664 0.058150111329 12% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 5.90881763527 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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