TOPIC 2: Some people think that the government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.To what extent do you agree with this view?

Few among masses believe that authority is squandering funds on creative activities and same could be a superior utility in other things. In this essay, I shall emphasize the people’s notion and give my opinion.

As we all know , every individual to a certain level is unique with talent. Indeed, talent expresses distinct qualities one possesses. Firstly, in order to prosper one needs to develop their talent and master it to a level so that it could be of use in the future. Subsequently, to attain the quality one needs assistance and quality training to improve their skills. Therefore, government’s initiative spending money on these workshops would enable the individual to master the skills.

On the other hand, the notion that the people have funding workshops to learn art as a waste activity in contrast with spending on other like for example science and technology . Although the notion is to an extent agreed however, it is art to have such a thoughtful provoke which enables representing science and technology. Lastly, there is a considerable contribution of the artistic people in making the world a better place in relation to science and technology.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that just learning science and technology is not essential but also learning art and skill. Hence forth, I see authorities taking such initiatives and spend in art development. Moreover, the overemphasized view of some people thinking art learning is waste is absolutely incorrect.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, lastly, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1261.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 240.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25416666667 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0428855352 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591666666667 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1139327833 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20682399748 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628436321784 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535237114467 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10557538013 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238184268934 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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