Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: these days. children spend more time on doing homework or participating in organized activities related to school or sport. However, they should be give more time to do whatever they want
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes highly charged and widespread hot topic whether children should spend their time on the activities which related to school or sport or not. Therefore, some people are leading the proponents of the claims that children's time should be consumed on activities that they are really interested in. However, others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it would be more beneficial for them that they spend more time on some activities related to their school. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter point. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most irrefutable reasons.
To begin with, school authority is skillful enough to make a plan for students. To elaborate it, since they are supposed to attend to society in the near future, they are prepared well in order to become successful, what it better, they can chase their dream without any kinds of problem. Experience has shown us that most student like to play video games and something related to this activity, Imagine that if they are allowed to what they are really interested in, how they can focus on their homework. What I am sure is that their assignments will be sacrificed by playing a video game. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better when I was in high school, we were allowed to spend two hours of our time on what we want. Some student made a group in order to solve their problems in math, some student consumed their time on watching football. Guess what was the result? Those who spent their time on math did not have any difficulties to pass their course but others group had a lot of problems.
Apart from students' success, another important reason is that so important has budget been that most schools have had the problem to meet it from all over the world. On the one hand, some people believe that student should spend their time on activities that they want and school should provide them everything they want. On the other hand, others believe that schools budget are really limited and they cannot provide for student whatever they want. For this reason, I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more students want to spend their time on the activity they want, the more schools have the problem to meet their needs. Because their budget comes from public or private channel that they should spend it on some important things that they are really related to the school activities. For this reason, they cannot fulfill what there are in student's mind.
To wrap it up, considering aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that nowadays, spending more time on the organized activities related to their school bring them more advantages inasmuch in the first place, they are prepared well for their future, in the second place, they due to limitation of budget at schools they cannot do what they want. What make me sure and hopeful is that in the not too distant future student spend more time on things related to their education, for whereby, they can make an outstanding contribution to their society improve, and as a proverb says "the biggest room in the world, is the room for improvement" I firmly believe that it is prominent for us to help our society's breakthrough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
... in order to become successful, what it better, they can chase their dream without any...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2796.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 583.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79588336192 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45429552363 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43910806175 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 848.7 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.8311859193 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.142857143 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7619047619 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341489643783 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112344093866 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948823860305 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244794131092 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644298951965 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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