TOEFL TPO topics - Integrated Writing TasksTPO - 06

The lecturer addresses each of the three criticisms of communal online encyclopedias mentioned in the Reading passage.
The lecturer admits that communal online encyclopedias, like any reference book, may contain errors, but she claims that these errors can be corrected much more easily and quickly than those printed in a paper encyclopedia. The Reading passage, in contrast, points to the inaccuracy of information in online encyclopedias, presenting the argument that errors in these resources are due to lack of professional knowledge among contributors.
The lecturer then gives two strategies that have been proven very effective in protecting online encyclopedias from malicious alteration. She explains that contents that consist of indisputable facts are stored and presented in a read-only format so that nobody can make changes to them. In addition, she says, there are specialists who constantly monitor contents online so that they can quickly remove a suspicious change once it is detected.
The lecturer also challenges the final point in the reading regarding the nature of topics covered in online encyclopedias. She says that because of virtually unlimited space on the Internet. there is no need to worry about what is important enough for inclusion in an online encyclopedia.
Moreover, the greater variety of topics in online encyclopedias more truly reflects the genuine interests of the general public, even if some of these topics are less serious or academic than those in traditional encyclopedias

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 224, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... those printed in a paper encyclopedia. The Reading passage, in contrast, points to...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...essional knowledge among contributors. The lecturer then gives two strategies that...
^^^
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...tually unlimited space on the Internet. there is no need to worry about what is impor...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 114, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...y reflects the genuine interests of the general public, even if some of these topics are less ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'in addition', 'in contrast']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237154150198 0.261695866417 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.146245059289 0.158904122519 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0909090909091 0.0723426182421 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0632411067194 0.0435111971325 145% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0276679841897 0.0277247811725 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.166007905138 0.128828473217 129% => OK
Participles: 0.0474308300395 0.0370669169778 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07491921928 2.5805825403 119% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0158102766798 0.0208969081088 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.114624505929 0.128158765124 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0158102766798 0.0158828679856 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158102766798 0.0114777025283 138% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1524.0 1645.83664459 93% => OK
No of words: 234.0 271.125827815 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.51282051282 6.08160592843 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.04852973271 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.440170940171 0.374372842146 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.333333333333 0.287516216867 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.252136752137 0.187439937562 135% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.192307692308 0.113142543107 170% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07491921928 2.5805825403 119% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.539623497131 114% => OK
Word variations: 63.9866394946 53.8517498576 119% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0529801325 77% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4 21.7502111507 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.937366125 49.3711431718 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.4 132.220823453 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 21.7502111507 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.878197800319 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.39072847682 118% => OK
Readability: 56.7333333333 50.5018328374 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.9 1.90840788429 100% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0189085087813 0.549887131256 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0950890952635 0.142949733639 67% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0658614927659 0.0787303798458 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.682400346213 0.631733273073 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.191333350852 0.139662658121 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00903796726587 0.266732575781 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0186624004203 0.103435571967 18% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.333299266891 0.414875509568 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0476011961413 0.0530846634433 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0155937619648 0.40443939384 4% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217891905905 0.0528353158467 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.62251655629 110% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 10.2958057395 97% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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