A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the company

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
Simmarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir,

I am writing you, with regard on your request on feedback on sponsoring local childrens sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. According to my knowledge, I suggest you to sponsor the children’s sports team for two years.

Firstly, I would like you to make your attention on the benefits you can gain through sponsoring this event. You can make awareness on the product in general public, since the sports team is very popular among the habitants of our city. You can use the children’s sports team as brand ambassordors of your product as your company is engaged in children’s sports clothing. On the other hand, you can consider this as a charity work because most of the children of the team need financial assistance in carrying out their sporting career.

Secondly, if we consider about the open-air concert you will be getting advertisingg only for a short period of time unlike sponsoring the sporting team for two years. However, in our city people are keen interested on such events, specially during the festival season which would give you abundant advertising withing the money you spend.

By evaluating the two options, I would recommend you to select the first option, since it will help to improve the skills of the children while encouraging other children in taking part in such events.

I wish all the success in your future endavours.

Yours faithfully,

K.C.K Peiris

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ou can make awareness on the product in general public, since the sports team is very popular ...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e getting advertisingg only for a short period of time unlike sponsoring the sporting team for...
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Line 15, column 5, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: K
... endavours. Yours faithfully, K.C.K Peiris
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 26.3917525773 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 937.175257732 130% => OK
No of words: 241.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05394190871 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76447591686 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585062240664 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 350.1 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 1.44329896907 485% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.6132638677 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.727272727 76.5299724578 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 4.34317383033 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340059656336 0.216113520407 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138266069152 0.0766984524023 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124413092984 0.0603063233224 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177970185821 0.12726935374 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149688682665 0.0580467560999 258% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 8.37731958763 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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