The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
A glance at people's way of forming a family brings to a light question that has several times provoked discussions, that is, whether having big gamily thesedays is more or less important than the past time. Some might contend that the whole world is filled with the individualism, so living with all the gradparents and cousins is even more crucial. However, I would like to suggst that big family matter less thesedays in terms of respect toward an individual life and high rate of migration. In the ensuing paragraph, I will try to shed some light on my perspective hrough ample examples and conspicuous reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned here firstly is that people are more satisfied with life with less family members living together. There is a research that shows this point of view. The federal community center of US did investigated two group of people about their emothinal stability, depending on the menbers of their family. The result showed that some of the people who lived in a conventionally big family reported an emotional harrasement, due to the fact that their relatives did not fully repect their individuality and privacy. But the other group, especially the people who live alone and sustain a fortable life with their own income, showed a greate emotional stability.
Another point here to be mentioned is that this time of era, the migration and expat life is so common that it's hard to live even with core family members like parents or siblings. My personal experence will give a good example. Right now, I live in Seoul, and my sister lives in Paris, and my mon live in the Southern part of Korea. We used to live altogether 4 years ago, but we spreaded domestically and internatinally with our own reasons and motives. Still, we get together around once in a year, and that's pretty much enough. No full time living and sharing everything together is necessary.
Although the aformentioned points corss the mind at the first glance, it does not mean that they are the only one. Actually, there is another subtle point which much be borne in mind. It should be noted that the government policies are changing in a way that they are increasing the duable housing loan for the those who live alone or with two. This never happed before 2010, because the country wanted people to get marry and reproduce as before. The change in governmental poliy demonstrates that the conventinal big family matter less than the past.
Due to the aforementioned ground, I firmly belive that living with relatives like cousins, aunts, and uncles is less likely to happen from now on, and the emotional life and the increased migration of individual are two prime reasons.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85032537961 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63142152416 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544468546638 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5488695088 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.476190476 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9523809524 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.19047619048 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135723384907 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371267753734 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631097176012 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851278540869 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511917210679 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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