Claim: Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study.
Reason: Acquiring knowleadge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
In my view, to be truly educated is to have knowledge beyond the restricted cirriculum and to explore a variety of other fields which would bring profound insights in the subject. The author claims that universities must make it mandatory for students to take up variety of courses other than the student's major field of study. I agree with his reasoning that knowledge aquired thorugh various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
Let us take for example, a student who is pursuing his academic goal of becoming a successful lawyer. For such a student, there will be man...
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Sentence: In my view, to be truly educated is to have knowledge beyond the restricted cirriculum and to explore a variety of other fields which would bring profound insights in the subject.
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Sentence: I agree with his reasoning that knowledge aquired thorugh various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
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Sentence: But, consider if this student also takes up a course on criminal psychology which is not an essential part of his cirriculum.
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Sentence: Apart from his cirriculum if this student's university makes it mandatory for him to take up a variety of other courses, it would benefit him in more ways than one.
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Sentence: Moreover, if this student takes up a communication and body language class as a part of his extra courses, it would develop him to be a confident bussinessman.
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Sentence: Such an all rounder bussiness man can be called truly educated.
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Sentence: In conclusion, I beleive that universities must make it mandatory for every student to take up a variety of courses apart from their mundane cirriculum.
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Sentence: It would expose them to different areas and provide profound insights to their proffession, hence making them truly educated.
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