The chart below shows possible causes and results of urban drift where large numbers of people move from rural to urban areas Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart below shows possible causes and results of ‘urban drift’, where large numbers of people move from rural to urban areas.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the possible causes of people move from rural to urban areas.

In this globalization era, a lot of people are using fossil fuel as their main of fuel for their vehicles and factories. The use of vehicles produces much carbon dioxide and pollution for the world. Moreover, the effect of environmental pollution in the world is getting hotter than the other day . The climate will fluctuate and affect the change of seasons in the world like pests and length of drought in the farmland. This could make the farmer lost their harvest and they will not have much money for their life.

For those reasons, the people in the village moved to the city to continue their life but basically they make the city became more overcrowding with the young people. In addition, they did not get any jobs and they create the number of crimes which increases higher every year. Next, this gives the impact for their social life and healthy problem, like waterborne diseases, diarrhea, typhus and etc.

In conclusion, using fossil fuels in large quantities will give bad effects on today’s climate. As a result, it gives a complex problem for human life and environment.

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they make the city became more overcrowding
they make the city more overcrowding

the effect of environmental pollution in the world is getting hotter than the other day .
the effect of environmental pollution in the world is getting hotter than that in the other day .

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