Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome?
One of the topics of heated debates among experts is what effects has technology on individual’s lives. It is indisputably proven that development in technology, as we all are aware and have probably experienced, not only makes a fundamental and effective contribution to having an advanced country, but also provides an opt ground to have a more convenient survival. However all these improvements comes down to the fact that it may negatively impact countries in some ways relating to the environment, population and education. Researches are of the point of view that all these issues are interrelated.
At first place I would like to mention one of the problems of environment, which is pollution due to industries, cars and deforesting for making more space to construct new buildings, which the vast increase in growth of population is the major reason for it. Increasing population leads to increase of needs to more vehicles and excessive use of cars that lots of smoke is emitted from them, cause a significant pollution in the air.
Secondly, these days advancement in healthcare and improvement in lifestyles, pave the path for people to live much longer than before and as a result of this, population will be increased. Also there is a wealth of educational facilities and the majority of people are educated but on the other hand there is not enough job for them and dearth of enough jobs leads to increasing unemployment, which influences increasing crime among nations.
To sum up, all these problems are some how related to each other and I personally believe that if government and people underestimate them there will be a huge problem in future that can not be prevented. In my view, government should implement drastic measurements to bring these risks under the control.
Sentence: However all these improvements comes down to the fact that it may negatively impact countries in some ways relating to the environment, population and education.
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Sentence: To sum up, all these problems are some how related to each other and I personally believe that if government and people underestimate them there will be a huge problem in future that can not be prevented.
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Sentence: At first place I would like to mention one of the problems of environment, which is pollution due to industries, cars and deforesting for making more space to construct new buildings, which the vast increase in growth of population is the major reason for it.
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Sentence: Secondly, these days advancement in healthcare and improvement in lifestyles, pave the path for people to live much longer than before and as a result of this, population will be increased.
Error: healthcare Suggestion: health care
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