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The reading claims that the archaeologist in Iraq proposed that vessel, they found, were ancient electric batteries, but it is not likely that the vessels were used as electric batteries in ancient times and it provides three reasons of support. In contrast, the professor states that the arguments in the passage are not convincing and she refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the article avers that if the vessels were used as batteries, they would probably have been attached to some electricity conductors such as metal wires. However, the lecturer opposes this point by saying that the vessels were discovered by local people and not by archaeologists so these people didn't train to recognize the important materials in the location. In fact, she mentions that they might overlooked to these materials or even threw them a way.

Second, the reading asserts that the copper cylinder inside th jars look exactly like copper sylinders discovered in th ruins of Seleucia, and the copper were used for holding scrolls of sacred texts, not of electricity. On the other hand, the professor counters this point by stating that it is true that copper in Seleucia were used for holding scroll, but there is no a proof that the copper in Iraq were used the same purpose. Actually, she argues that they discovered the copper in Iraq together with iron inside clay to produce electricity so the copper in clay were used to another purpose because they adapted the previous purpose of using copper. This challenges the assertion in the article.

Third, the article posits that ancient people had no devices that replied on electricity. Conversely, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that the questions in the passage have answers. According to the professor, they produced shock by these vessels, and they used the shock for invisible power and magic purpose. In addition, they used it for medical purpose to relief pain and to produce movements in the muscles. This appears a contradiction to the information made in the passage.

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that vessel, they found, were ancient electric batteries,
that vessels they found were ancient electric batteries,

Sentence: In fact, she mentions that they might overlooked to these materials or even threw them a way.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to might and overlooked

that the copper cylinder inside th jars look exactly like
that the copper cylinder inside the jars looks exactly like

but there is no a proof
but there is no proof

were used the same purpose
were used in the same purpose

to relief pain
to relieve pain

Sentence: Second, the reading asserts that the copper cylinder inside th jars look exactly like copper sylinders discovered in th ruins of Seleucia, and the copper were used for holding scrolls of sacred texts, not of electricity.
Error: sylinders Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: th Suggestion: No alternate word

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No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 14 12
No. of Words: 341 250
No. of Characters: 1674 1200
No. of Different Words: 162 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.909 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.516 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.754 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4