TPO 19 intergrated reading
The reading passage argues about the problems raised by a new advertising tactic---- "buzzing". Buzzing means promoting products to people they know or meet. However, the speaker, a student taking part-time job as a buzzer, disagrees with the reading, by sharing his own viewpoints for the related experience.
The reading says that companies hire the buzzers in the purpose of praising the product, which is rebuts by the students. In the student's opinion, companies hire those use the products for a period of time and consider the quality is really great. Hence, the buzzers just tell the truth to the consumers according to their own experiences. After communicating with buzzers, consumers surely will have got useful knowledge about the products in order to decide whether buy or not.
The student points out the information the buzzers give the consumers are very helpful to them which refutes the idea given by the reading. He says once the buzzers talk to the consumers, the consumers often have many questions to ask like the product's price, serve, and how long they have used such products. Since the buzzers know the products well, Consumers can usually get useful answers instead of being harmed as the reading mentions.
The student contends that the buzzers are sincere and always recommend good products to the consumers, which have positive effect on the social relationship. He explains that the consumers would be more trustful and open to such method of the company advertising in such way after the good experience. The reading, saying that buzzing will leave bad impression to the consumers, seems unlikely.
Sentence: However, a students who take a parttime job as a buzzer disagree with the reading, by sharing his own viewpoints for the related experince.
Description: The fragment who take a is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace take with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment buzzer disagree with is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace disagree with verb, past participle
Sentence: The reading says that the buzzers hired by the company is in the purpose of praising the product, which is rebutes by the students.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to is and rebutes
Sentence: In the student's opinion, company hire those who use the products for a period of time and consider the quality is really great.
Description: The fragment company hire those is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace hire with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
The students states the information the ...
The students state that the information the ...
Sentence: However, a students who take a parttime job as a buzzer disagree with the reading, by sharing his own viewpoints for the related experince.
Error: experince Suggestion: experience
Sentence: Hence, the buzzers just tell the truth to the consumers according to their own experinces.
Error: experinces Suggestion: experiences
Sentence: He says once the buzzers talk to the consumers, the consumers often have many questions to ask like the product's price, serve, and how long they have used such poduct.
Error: poduct Suggestion: product
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
Same grammar issues.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 238 250
No. of Characters: 1169 1200
No. of Different Words: 139 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.928 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.912 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.433 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.786 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.401 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.624 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4