According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the last year. Clearly, the content of these reviews is not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater quantity of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
The argument deliniating in this passage calimed that Super Screen should allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising is flawed. There are some flaws because in this passage who are the prospective viewers, which movies are qualityful is not clear here.
According those report during past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies yet the percentage of the positive reviews is increased. It is a irrelevant assertion . It can be happended that the movie is good as people give that movie a good review. Always negative comments with positive review can not measure a quality of a movie. It also can be happened that in fewer people there were also prospective viewers. Who are the prospective viewer that was not discussed. What is the quality of a movie? If quality of a movie is good there is no necessity that public always attend in a Super Screen produced movie because now people is more attached to the internet than Super Screen movies. Furthermore, If the arrangement of give review about a movie in the internet , it should be possible marketing department get reviews from prospective viewers. Advertising plays important role in a movie industry but this is not necessary that big budget advertising movie always get prospectuve viewers.
In conclusion there was a good amount of flaws in the discussion. People is getting attached to the internet more now so advertising through internet is a good investment to get a fair review about a movie. But greater budget in advertising can not make a good quality movies and achieve a good perspective viewers For this reason one can say that quality is important ,budget is not.
Comments
e-rater score report
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Minimum four paragraphs wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1391 1500
No. of Different Words: 128 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.881 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.47 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...he positive reviews is increased. It is a irrelevant assertion . It can be happen...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... increased. It is a irrelevant assertion . It can be happended that the movie is g...
^^
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le there were also prospective viewers. Who are the prospective viewer that was not...
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Line 3, column 783, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ive review about a movie in the internet , it should be possible marketing departm...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...on one can say that quality is important ,budget is not.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 285.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97894736842 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72809171947 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456140350877 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.315963147 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399298263674 0.218282227539 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140281390373 0.0743258471296 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166281455403 0.0701772020484 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233515426474 0.128457276422 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.191312610295 0.0628817314937 304% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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