"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The conclusion about reducing 50% the moped accidents is not well supported by the author’s statements. Author suggests that limiting the number of moped rentals will effectively reduce the rate of accidents on Bolmer Island, while this could be true under certain conditions the author fails to establish which ones were used to derive the conclusion. The relationship between the assumptions presented in the statement and the conclusion is logically deficient, it will be wiser if the author
Firstly, the increment in population every summer could be the result of seasonal touristic activity which is beneficial for the economy of the Island. As it was pointed out by the author, the mopeds are a popular form of transportation. If the usage of mopeds is constrained then the tourist activity might be affected, putting the economy of the Island in a risky situation. Alongside this troublesome economy and the lesser availability of mopeds, the congestion and the chances of accidents might increase. Council would find useful to wonder if reducing the availability of mopeds will not worse the economy of Island and consequently the transportation system?.
Furthermore, the author quotes an example of a similar legislation ruled in the island of Seaville, Bolmer policy aims to mimic the result of Seaville. However, the author does not cite the conditions of Seaville before the legislation was promulgated. Several factors such as demographic, economic, and even tourist conditions play an important role for this legislation to be successful in reducing the moped accidents in Seaville. The author could have wonder if the circumstances between the aforementioned islands are different. Given that this fundamental question was not raised, there is no reason to believed that the legislation in Beamer will lead to the same results as in Seaville. The author mistakenly relies in assuming this comparison as veritable, weakening the conclusion.
In addition, author might have found useful to examine other causes of moped accidents, one could question, are the moped security standards still suitable to handle the island transportation system?. If affirmative, the council could have reformulated a different legislation that focus on enhancing the security standards used by moped.
In conclusion, the author fails to support the conclusion by mistakenly assuming that accidents could be reduced by limiting the moped availability. The author does not have a forward-looking view of the consequences of this constrain— moped accidents might increase—. Moreover, the author fails to address the circumstances in Seaville island before legislation implementation, if circumstances differs from the ones of Bolmer then the conclusion lacks of creditability.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263829787234 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.159574468085 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0765957446809 0.0836205057962 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0404255319149 0.0520304965353 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00425531914894 0.0272364105082 16% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.136170212766 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0510638297872 0.0416121511921 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.21316496087 2.79052419416 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0234042553191 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00212765957447 0.001811407834 117% => OK
Determiners: 0.148936170213 0.113004496875 132% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.031914893617 0.0255425247493 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0063829787234 0.0127820249294 50% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2783.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 425.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.54823529412 6.12365571057 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.435294117647 0.378187486979 115% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.334117647059 0.287650121315 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.258823529412 0.208842608468 124% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.207058823529 0.135150697306 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21316496087 2.79052419416 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 207.018472906 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456470588235 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 49.6699572219 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 23.6111111111 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8818151142 57.7814097925 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.611111111 141.986410481 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6111111111 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.724660767414 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 57.022875817 51.9672348444 110% => OK
Elegance: 2.20833333333 1.8405768891 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.560909386512 0.441005458295 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.168884160731 0.135418324435 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0799641895818 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.687071305408 0.58762219726 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0937159349051 0.147661913831 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.300138845405 0.193483328276 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939313784082 0.0970749176394 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.5107547635 0.42659136922 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0863990030324 0.0774707102158 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.420805534549 0.312017818177 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981469708165 0.0698173142475 141% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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