The author claims here that to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies by half during the summer season as population increases during the summer. The arguments fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated whether the claim is likely to have the predicted result. To justify this recommendation, the author reasons that similar goal was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville’s town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s recommendation. Hence, the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that mopeds are the only reason of accidents in Balmer. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. For example, accidents can be due to pedestrian’s carelessness also, but author did not take that into consideration. Similarly, there can a number of other reasons for accidents. Also, author did not mention the difference in population during summer and non-summer months. Is this difference by 1000 or 50000? Hence, the argument would have been more convincing if it explicitly proves that rented mopeds are causing accidents when the population is increasing by a significant number.
The author claims also points out that accidents will reduce by 50% by limiting the moped rentals from 50 per day to 25 per day. If so, then what about the owned mopeds. Surely, if they reduce the number of rented mopeds, people will start getting their own mopeds and then who is to be blamed for the accidents that will still be going on? This, again, is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate any clear correlation between renting mopeds and accidents. If the argument had provided evidence that rented mopeds are the only cause of accidents, then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author cites that since something worked for Seaville, it would work for Balmer too. It provides little credible support for author’s conclusion in respect that Seaville and Balmer are two different places with a lot differences. For example, the population can be different, number of mopeds can be different, people might have been more careful while walking in streets and a lot more. Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable survey of the reasons for accidents during summers in Balmer. Finally, to better evaluate the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about what are the main reasons behind accidents between mopeds and pedestrians.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2529 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.282 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 223, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...s moped rental companies by half during the summer season as population increases during the summ...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'fail'.
Suggestion: fail
...reases during the summer. The arguments fails to mention several key factors, on the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, still, then, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24103585657 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89038333176 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486055776892 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7890681724 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.625 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284770490311 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780109398965 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116681434519 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172875334453 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975846105571 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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