"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has
spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in
Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in
neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve
schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect
excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far
greater than the national average."
In the conclusion, the author confidently claims that the Clearview is the top choice for retirement by provide some advantages. However, this conclusion still exists some flaws that undermines the reliability of this statement, which needs more information and details to corroborate it.
To begin with, the author assumes that the house’s price in Clearview has fallen significantly than before, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. It seems valid at first glimpse, but a few problems will be found after the scrutiny. Although the price of house has decreased, it may be still keep in higher level than others, which most of people don’t have the capacity to pay for it in this country. The taxes is similar to the price. In all likelihood, Clearview and neighboring towns are the distinctions of living for elites and wealthy, which is not fit every retirees to live. Therefore, the author should make a survey and study of the cost of Clearview comparing with national counterpart to guarantee the accuracy of the article.
Moreover, the mayor of Clearview promises many new programs will be constructed or improved. However, are these words convincing? Probably no, the mayor might just want to win the election of Clearview and make some commitments. These programs probably will not be constructed or always be delayed. If these commitments are fake, Could this town still be called ‘a top choice’? if mayor achieves these promises, it will be not profitable for all retirees, they are likely not interested in the programs of schools and streets, just care about the superior community service.
At last, it is unreliable for citizens who live in this town can expect excellent health care just because the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average. As we all know, achievements in science realm are justified in random, a process filled with difficulty. Therefore the progress in health may be happen in few days later or even hundreds years later, it is not reality to believe these words of more physicians more more possibilities of curing some diseases such cancers.
Consequently, the conclusion exists some questions, and author needs to provide more evidence to bolster it and eliminate the alternative possibilities.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1863 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.968 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.732 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.059 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.468 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.288 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 349, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...keep in higher level than others, which most of people don’t have the capacity to pay for it i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 429, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...o pay for it in this country. The taxes is similar to the price. In all likelihood...
^^
Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... delayed. If these commitments are fake, Could this town still be called ‘a top c...
^^
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...is town still be called ‘a top choice’? if mayor achieves these promises, it will ...
^^
Line 4, column 291, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ndom, a process filled with difficulty. Therefore the progress in health may be happen in...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 446, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: more
... believe these words of more physicians more more possibilities of curing some diseases s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 446, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'more' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: more
... believe these words of more physicians more more possibilities of curing some diseases s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1924.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14438502674 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84273266418 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0222234088 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.888888889 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201519991483 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615091509237 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525116350744 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918840892488 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679318749565 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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