Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.’
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It is concluded that Omega univerisity should stop its procedure as to let students evaluate their professors, in order to help graduates find better jobs. It is stated that professors tend to assign higher grades ever since this procedure initiated and this has led to employers discourage to hire graduates of this university. However, this conclusion cannot be drawn without providing the following evidences.
First, it should be presented that increase in students' score is merely because professors assign higher grades, not that students actually deserve these higher marks. For example, it is possible that professors have become more concerned about the efficacy of their classes and hence, they have adopted new trends in teaching, like using online material, etc. and this has led to better education and ultimately, better grades. Also, it is possible that Omega university has used these data to hire more efficient professors and letting ineffective professors go. In any of these scenarios, the argument is weakened.
Next, even if implementing this new policy had this effect as to inflate graduates' marks, the evidence is needed to show that reversing the decision will change employers opinion and ultimately help student find better jobs. Maybe reversing this procedure now will result in lower graduate scores while employers have not change their idea, in this case students wil have even less opportunity to secure jobs. Or maybe nothing changes in students' gardes and university loses its tool for examination of professos' effectiveness only. In this case education will deterorate drastically and employers' opinion about the university will be even worse. If any of these circumstances are possible, argument is flawed.
Last, evidence is needed to prove that better luck of graduates from Alpha university is indeed, because of the university's reputaion only. For instance, maybe employers are more likely to hire Alpha graduates because there is a stronger relation between Alpha university and corporations and they are more familiar with Alpha university's students. Also, it is a possibility that students with higher abilities choose Alpha university in the first place, and therefore, when they graduate, they are better candidtaes automatically. In any of these cases, the graduates' ability to secure jobs will not differ after reversing the decision and therefore, this argument does not hold water.
All in all, the current arguemnt, without any additional data, is extremely flawed. Providng the evidences mentioned above will strengthen the argument and make a better evaluation of that possible.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2177 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.336 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 71 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.851 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'changed'.
Suggestion: changed
...raduate scores while employers have not change their idea, in this case students wil h...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 560, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'graduates'' or 'graduate's'?
Suggestion: graduates'; graduate's
...tomatically. In any of these cases, the graduates ability to secure jobs will not differ ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47058823529 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76381921535 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492647058824 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9347496677 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.473684211 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209854990758 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062519253756 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558391759024 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119736811008 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576970565353 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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