The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The specified argument has some serious flaws. The culture might have been different twenty years ago, and hence Dr. Field conclusion is different than that by Dr. Karp. The number of children interviewed by Dr. Karp is not mentioned in the argment; the sample might not be representative of the entire population. There is no evidence to suggest that Dr. Karp’s interview-centered method will work for other island cultures.
First, the lifestyle of Tertia might have been very different from the current one. Children then might have been reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents, in contrast to childeren being reared by their biological parents nowadays. This might be the reason why Dr. Field and Dr. Karp reached different conclusions. For instance, if a study was conducted twenty years ago to find the most popular music in America, the results would have been rock music. But, if the same study is conducted now, the results would be pop. The study conducted twenty years ago can’t be declared as incorrect; people’s tastes and lifestyle change with time. So, to evaluate the argument, the information about whether there is a significant change in the lifestyle today and twenty years ago, is required. The argument would be weakened if the evidence suggests that there is a significant change in lifestyle.
Second, the argument does not specify the number of children interviewed by Dr. Karp and his team of graduate students. This number might be very less, and hence the sample might not be representative of the entire population. So, the conclusion reached by Dr. Karp might be incorrect. Hence, information about the number of children interviewed by Dr. Karp is required. If this number is very less, then this would weaken the argument seriously.
Finally, it is stated in the argument that the interview-centered method that Dr. Karp’s team of graduates is currently using will work for other island cultures as well, in addition to Tertia. There is no evidence provided in the passage which supports the claim that the interview-centered method will work for other island cultures. So,this information is required. If the evidence suggests that in all island cultures, children are reared by their biological parents, then the argument would be strengthened.
In conclusion, to evaluate the argument, the evidence cited above is required to evaluate the given argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The number of children interviewed by Dr. Karp is not mentioned in the argment; the sample might not be representative of the entire population.
Error: argment Suggestion: argument
Sentence: Children then might have been reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents, in contrast to childeren being reared by their biological parents nowadays.
Error: childeren Suggestion: children
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1980 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.799 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...hence Dr. Field conclusion is different than that by Dr. Karp. The number of childre...
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Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ion is different than that by Dr. Karp. The number of children interviewed by Dr. K...
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Line 7, column 344, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
... will work for other island cultures. So,this information is required. If the evidenc...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24427480916 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94033761227 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40203562341 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7426918864 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6818181818 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8636363636 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68181818182 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225496866727 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706570158149 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572539113315 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122655183166 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741565846203 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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