The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighbouring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter to the editor, shows that one of the popular forms of transportation in Balmer Island is the moped, and in the summer, the population of the island increases to 100,000. The letter also indicates that the number of moped accidents have increased as more mopeds are rented out. The writer, thus, advises that the number of mopeds rented daily by the rental companies, should be reduced by 50%, during the summer period. Although the writer includes some interesting facts to underpin his claim, there are still some vague and obscure areas and some questions that need to be answered, to validate the claim.
First, the writer did not include figures that show how the number of moped rentals relate with the number of moped accidents in the summer. What facts and figures are there to prove that the number of moped rentals are directly tied to the number of moped accidents? Some of the accidents might have occurred as a result of other circumstances. And some of the mopeds involved in accidents might actually be owned by individuals. Therefore, we are not certain that limiting the number of rentals per day, will actually reduce the number of accidents. Until a better correlation is presented, this argument is still an assumption.
Secondly, the writer indicates that the if the number of rentals are qualified, the town council will attain 50% reduction in moped accidents. How sure is the writer that the council will attain 50% reduction in moped accidents? Again, this is merely an assumption. There is not data to back it up. Building on the fact that there are probably other causes of moped accidents, it is still not certain that limiting the number of rentals will reduce ensure the 50% reduction hoped for. It does not cater for the number of moped accidents involving privately-owned mopeds.
Additionally, the writer goes on to indicate that Seaville, a nearby island achieved the said 50% reduction by taking up similar measure. But the letter does not take into account, the possible difference in the two islands. Is the standard of living in Balmer Island the same in Seaville Island?There is every possible chance that the Seaville Island is more developed than Balmer Island. The probably have more safety measures in place to prevent moped accidents, that when they reduced the number of moped rentals, they were able to achieve the 50% mark.
The writer clearly brings to light a topic of deep interest. But some of the facts mentioned are arguable. There are a couple of questions that need to be answered, and we cannot confirm, from the letter, that by limiting the number of moped rentals by 50%, the number of accidents will be reduced, or the town council will attain the desired 50% mark. Additionally, the comparison between the two islands does not accurately hold, because the standard of living in the two islands would very likely differ.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- because the neighbouring island of Seaville reached this percentage
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2334 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.754 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.458 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.287 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ncreased as more mopeds are rented out. The writer, thus, advises that the number o...
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Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... tied to the number of moped accidents? Some of the accidents might have occurred as a resu...
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Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...as a result of other circumstances. And some of the mopeds involved in accidents might actu...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... accidents, it is still not certain that limiting the number of rentals will redu...
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Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...lmer Island the same in Seaville Island?There is every possible chance that the Seavi...
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Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... to light a topic of deep interest. But some of the facts mentioned are arguable. There are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92244897959 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54992956269 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420408163265 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1291501647 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291464228274 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857492338265 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100066156006 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179164216968 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084705665869 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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