The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter from a central plaza store owner recommending that city should prohibit skateboarding in central plaza and in support of the claim owner points out that in past two years, number of shoppers in central plaza have reduced while the popularity of skateboarding has shown increase. He also states that there was dramatic increase in amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, by prohibiting the skateboarding in central plaza people will start shopping again and ultimately will result, business in central plaza return to its previous high levels. On close introspection, owners claim seems specious.
Firstly, owner of central plaza claims that reduce in number of shoppers in central plaza is due to increase in popularity of skateboarding. If might not be the case, there might be some others reasons for such reduction in shoppers in central plaza like people became jaded of shopping or there is another store which offers same product with some benefits that central plaza store is being offering. Thus, prohibiting skateboarding can lead to further loss.
Secondly, owner claims that dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza is because of increase in number of skateboards users in plaza. It might be wrong as their might be other reasons for such increase like the dustbins in central plaza are not be cleaned regularly leading to increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza or it might happen that in past two years, people are not being careful in disposing the waste in dustbin. In such cases, prohibiting skateboarding will not lead to reduce in amount of litter and vandalism.
Finally, Owner claims that increase in skateboarding in central plaza is main factor people abandoning shopping vice versa might be true. As skateboarding require more space and due to reduce in people shopping in central plaza store, number of skateboarders have increased.
The argument presented by owner is flawed, to strengthen argument, owner should provide firm evidence that there is no other store in competition is succeed in enticing people, skateboarding people are responsible for increase in litter and vandalism and skateboarding is the only factor resulting into decrease of shoppers in central plaza store.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not really. need to argue:
Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1899 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.146 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.749 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.041 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.469 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.657 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...ere is no other store in competition is succeed in enticing people, skateboarding peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27100271003 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80039572203 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420054200542 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.7365690576 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.615384615 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3846153846 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427165490963 0.218282227539 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186492801315 0.0743258471296 251% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132240983266 0.0701772020484 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285248304144 0.128457276422 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837885592586 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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