The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper."Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered inju

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.

"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine

participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries.

When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also

reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore,

education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be

used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in

Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the

argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the

implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author recommends that people in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine. The suggestion is mainly based on that more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports and over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries throughout the country last year. To strengthen his argument, he also points out that youth-league soccer players in several major cities reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games when interviewed for a recent study. However, the author should better evaluate the assumptions before he proves the validity of the argument.

The author mentions that throughout the country last year, over 40,000 of players below the age of nine suffered injuries when participating in youth-league sports. Basing on this fact, he infers that they should suspend the organized athletic competition for children under nine in order to decrease the injuries. However, the inference is fraught with dubious assumptions which need to be evaluated. First, the author only informs us that 40000 young players suffered injuries throughout the country last year, but we do not know the base amount of the total number of young players. If the base amount varies, for example, if it is dramatically larger than expected, the conclusion would be different, thus the 40000 players may be a small proportion of the total number of players, which means that there are merely a few young players have been hurt compared with the whole players. Besides, can the data from the whole country really be representative of the city of Parkville? Not exactly. Maybe the young players in Parkville seldom get injured. What’s more, it is totally possible that most of the injuries are only scratches rather than the severe ones like fractures, thus the degree of the injuries are not severe and it is unnecessary to discontinue organized athletic competition for children.

The author also demonstrates that youth-league soccer players in several major cities reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games when interviewed for a recent study, so he assumes they should discontinue the athletic competition for children. Nevertheless, he should evaluate the assumption. First, the soccer players cannot represent all players. It is entirely possible that the players of other kinds of sports, such as basketball or baseball, do not have such pressure like football players. And the lack of representativeness can also be said for that the condition in Parkville may be diametrically different form the one in major cities. Hence, the young players in Parkville may not suffer from the heavy pressure. In addition, the young players are likely to lie in the interview because they want to evade the intense exercise. Therefore, if the author eliminates the possibilities which weaken the assumption, the argument might be more persuasive.

On the basis that the two aforementioned reports are reliable and representative, it is still hasty to implement the author’s suggestion in absence of caring about the negative impacts it may bring about. First, children can acquire chances to foster the teamwork spirits and competence, such as cooperation and leadership. If discontinue the competition, the chances of cultivating such merits may not exist. Besides, the athletic competition can also make them brave to overcome the adversity and enhance their tenacity as well as helping them to keep a clear mind when studying. Under these scenarios, the advantages of the athletic competition far outweigh its disadvantages. Hence, the recommendation cannot hold water without better evaluating the assumptions.

Overall, although the conclusion might be plausible, the author should assess the assumptions to substantiate the argument. Had the author considered the possible scenarios to strengthen the assumption, the conclusion and the whole argument might have been persuasive.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3406.0 2260.96107784 151% => OK
No of words: 621.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4847020934 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.991980728 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00762392351 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1025.1 705.55239521 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4994249956 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.642857143 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1785714286 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.67857142857 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266353896674 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746583193884 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134345694642 0.0701772020484 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152310528304 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137249366683 0.0628817314937 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 98.500998004 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 621 350
No. of Characters: 3309 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.992 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.329 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.895 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 257 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 198 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 143 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 87 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.414 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.44 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.69 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.446 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5