The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The study concludes that if professors are given free tuition this will enhance morale and faculty retention. The conclusion is drawn from the observation that professors are more likely to stay when they're offered free tuition. This study assumes the above statement without providing enough evidence to coroborate it.The following 3 requested evidence should be provided for the study to be considered.
The conducted study would have to produce the difference in faculty retention of when the offer is made and isn't. It could be the case that retention without the offer is normally at a high percentage with the offer only bumping up that percentage by a minute number. It is thus neccesary that tangible proof in terms of factual nubers be provided to strengthen the study's assumption.
Still on topic with regards to the inadequacy of the proof provided by this study. The study fails to state if all retained professors even have children of college age. It's possible that the professors dont have any children and would love to work for Seatown university. it is also plausible that the proffessors have children who are done with college. the lack of evidence in terms of if these professors who choose to stay can benefit from the offer made further weakens this argument thus corroborating the inadequacy of the report of this study.
The study goes on to state that a scenario where this offer is made available to all professors would result in an increase in morale and would help Seatown secure more applicants. However, the study fails to indicate if the universities professors are currently uncomfortable with the fact that such offer isn't open to them or state factual proof that such an offer would result in an increased inflow of applications. possibly the university gets more applications than it can handle and thus would be acting against itself by making such an offer possible. it is also possible that the current lecturers have no business with such an offer as they are being paid insane amounts of money for salary. lack of proof that making such an offer to all professors would result in better morale or more professors wanting to join the institution exacerbates the severe flaws of this argument.
It goes without saying that the severe lack of evidence provided from this study puts a lot of holes in the assumption that an increase in offer of free tuition would result in an increase in the retention of professors. till the above requested evidences can be provided the argument stated by this study doesn't hold water and thus should be taken with a grain of salt.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2143 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.738 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94117647059 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6140690925 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432126696833 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8814898528 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.333333333 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5555555556 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.22222222222 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22000220683 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805463368689 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590620132895 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135877160701 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521407985794 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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