The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument concludes that restricting the maximum flow to one-third of what it used to be will save water and money. By application of this method for the remaining buildings will results in increase of further profit as stated by the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex. However, before concluding this the author has to answer the following questions as below.
Firstly, there is no actual readings of water usuage before and after the adjustment were made. So, we cannot conclude that the use of water before and after has some declining graph. The assumptions are made on the basis of judgement which can or cannot be true. So, the author need to provide exact readings of the water usage before making any furthur changes or application of it.
Secondly, according to the author, complaints about the changes made in water pressure of the showerheads were very few. Also no problems with the showers have been reported since the adjustment. But, where each and every shower of the building been checked after the adjustments? Did every complex houses were reviewed for the change made and were they positive or negative? Clearly there is no evidence to conclude that restricting the flow of showerheads to one-third as compared to previous has changed the water comsumption. Also, water is not only used for showers but also for many other household activities like washing clothes, utensils and many more.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted asssumptions. If the author is able to answer the above questions and is ready to provide a systematic or actual details then it will be possible to evaluate the conclusion. Later, the evaluated data can be used for further applications.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1448 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.925 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.146 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument concludes that restricting ...
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Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...method for the remaining buildings will results in increase of further profit as stated...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...swer the following questions as below. Firstly, there is no actual readings of ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... furthur changes or application of it. Secondly, according to the author, compl...
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Line 3, column 128, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ssure of the showerheads were very few. Also no problems with the showers have been ...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...e adjustments? Did every complex houses were reviewed for the change made and were t...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shing clothes, utensils and many more. In conclusion, the argument as it stands...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04081632653 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72296703859 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554421768707 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3744855924 57.8364921388 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.625 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189544156005 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565364494291 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660331264066 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109813969137 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958547669182 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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