The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the memo from the director of student housing at buckingham college, the director recommends to build a number of new dormitories to cope up with the growing enrollment at buckingham. He supports his claim providing evidence of rising avarage rent of an apartment in the town and the difficulty to afford off-campus housing. however, before adopting such a measure, these three specific evidences must be needed to evaluate the argument.
First of all, it is important to provide evidence for the growing enrollment over the next 50 years. current trend may be faulty. it is possible that current trend can't ensure the growing rate to be existent for the 50 years. it is possible that enrollment at the college may fall in the upcoming days. may be the enrollment can keep constant with no increase. it is necessary to provide evidence for the cosistency of the growing rate over the next 50 years. The argument fails to take account for this case and thus is weak.
Secondly, the argument states the evidence of rising average apartment rate in the town to provide support for building new dormitories. however, this might not be the case. may be the apartment rent in the town drstically fall in the next 50 years. it will provide an opportunity to the students to rent an apaverage artment off-campus. this evidence must be considered critically. evidence must be provided to support for the rising apartment rent in the
upcoming 50 years. otherwise, the argument will be very weak.
Finally, the argument fails to address the case of affluence of the students. may be the students are from wealthy families. So, economical restrictions will be of very little value to them. they can easily cope up with the increased rent of the apartment in the off-campus region. they can afford the apartments easily and in that case there will be no need for the new dormatories. evidence must show that the students who enroll in the college come from lower class families and they are not in position to deal with the increased apartment rate in the town. otherwise , the recommendation will be invalid.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed as it does not consider the possibility of three cases. evidence of the stated three cases must be provided before taking the recommendation for implementation. otherwise, the purpose of the recommendation will never be fullfilled and building new dormitories will be nothing but waste of resources and effort.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2005 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.305 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.701 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
...ifficulty to afford off-campus housing. however, before adopting such a measure, these ...
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Suggestion: It
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Suggestion: Otherwise
... the recommendation for implementation. otherwise, the purpose of the recommendation will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99757869249 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82590940439 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414043583535 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.169927896 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4444444444 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2962962963 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48148148148 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162188222193 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476380599131 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100277519549 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946143659211 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10686286903 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.3799401198 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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