The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The mayor of Hillview recommends the City Council to authorize a campaign that will attract Autotech an automobile company, to build a manufacturing plant in Hillview. The Mayor also recommends offering tax incentives to attract the company. The mayor claims that this new manufacturing unit will help solve the problem of unemployment in Hillview. While the argument does sound good, there are however certain assumptions made and some factors that need to be evaluated before arriving at the conclusion.
Firstly, the mayor says that the landfill area which has been undeveloped for decades can be used to build the manufacturing plant. The mayor assumes that this land would be suitable for the new plant. The building of a manufacturing plant depends on a lot of factors, there are certain rules and regulations that need to be followed. It is important to know whether the land being discussed complies with the requirements of a manufacturing plant area and is it suitable for the same. The land was not developed for decades, what were the reasons for the same? There might be legal disputes over ownership of the land or some other matters that have hobbled the development of this area. So it is important to know whether there are legal problems with respect to the landfill area.
Secondly, a manufacturing plant requires raw material, transport facilities, etc. Would Hillview be able to provide these amenities to the plant? These factors also need to be weighed before approaching the company for building a plant. The argument says that the new plant if built will provide employment to the people of Hillview. The building of a plant in certain city does not guarantee that the company will employ people from that city only. It might prefer employing people from neighboring cities if they are ready to work at relatively lower wages. Thus, the council needs to have an understanding or an agreement with the company that if they are authorized to build a plant they will employ people from Hill view. If such an agreement is not done beforehand the claim that the plant will reduce unemployment carries little validity.
The mayor claims that people who were unemployed last year after Computech abandoned it's national facility last year, will start working in the new plant. The skills and expertise that an individual has plays an important role in what job he/she chooses. The employees of the Computech company which was a software company have different skills from what is actually needed to work in a manufacturing plant. These are completely different industries and the people might choose not to work in the plant because that is not their line of work or expertise. Thus, the assumption that the former Computech employers will now be employed is unwarranted.
Thus, there are a lot of factors that the council needs to evaluate before authorizing a campaign and trying to attract the Autotech company. It needs to have a holistic view of the situation and work rigorously on all aspects ranging from evaluating the area under discussion to the requirements of an automobile plant to the amount of employment provided by such a plant.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... tax incentives to attract the company. The mayor claims that this new manufacturin...
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Line 5, column 728, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...they will employ people from Hill view. If such an agreement is not done beforehan...
^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ortant role in what job he/she chooses. The employees of the Computech company whic...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 528.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01893939394 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75924025689 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414772727273 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1083786156 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.923076923 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231930385248 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754869303536 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659031914358 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139105358695 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529679520141 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... tax incentives to attract the company. The mayor claims that this new manufacturin...
^^^
Line 5, column 728, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...they will employ people from Hill view. If such an agreement is not done beforehan...
^^
Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ortant role in what job he/she chooses. The employees of the Computech company whic...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 528.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01893939394 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75924025689 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414772727273 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1083786156 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.923076923 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231930385248 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754869303536 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659031914358 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139105358695 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529679520141 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.