The claim made by the memo that Appian Roadways company is better qualified to build the access roads than the Good Intentions Roadways company has certain questions that need to be answered.
The build quality of the two companies has been compared based on a section of two different roads. Now the first question arises as to whether the weather conditions in the two areas of the roads are similar or different. This is a very pertinent question as it makes a significant contribution to deciding whether the recommendation made by the vice-president should be agreed or whether it needs some changes to be made to it. Another question that arises is based on the hiring of a new quality control manager by the Appian roadways. The section of the road made by Appian roadways was built four years back so we can safely assume that the person in-charge of quality would have been different.
But the first question that has been asked mentions whether the conditions were same for the two sections. This is a general question as the companies building the roads should have looked at the weather conditions of the area where the section of the road was being built. Thus the presence of cracks and dangerous potholes in the section of road built by Good Intention Roadways shows the lack of the company's ability to make good quality roads. Another factor that disqualifies the Good Intention Roadways is the matter of time that took for the road to degrade. The road, built by Good Intention Roadways cracked and developed potholes in two years whereas the road built by Appian Roadways is still in good condition after four years. That is a very significant factor in the favor of the Appian roadways. This also answers the question whether the new quality-manager hired by Appian roadways is upto the task of maintaining the quality while building the roads.
In conclusion I would say that the recommendation put forward is sound in argument and that the board can safely go ahead with the recommendation of hiring Appian roadways in constructing the mall's access roads.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
It is on the wrong track. In GRE, we have to always argue against the statements in the memo.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1706 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.806 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.768 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...nt roads. Now the first question arises as to whether the weather conditions in the two areas...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...he section of the road was being built. Thus the presence of cracks and dangerous po...
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Line 5, column 830, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... the Appian roadways. This also answers the question whether the new quality-manager hired by Appian...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, still, thus, whereas, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87605633803 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67126925425 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425352112676 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8173872636 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.642857143 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160577032157 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674369273673 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04634722864 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100556306756 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04763846312 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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