The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of a large, highly diversified company.
"Ten years ago our company had two new office buildings constructed as regional headquarters for two regions. The buildings were erected by different construction companies — Alpha and Zeta. Although the two buildings had identical floor plans, the building constructed by Zeta cost 30 percent more to build. However, that building's expenses for maintenance last year were only half those of Alpha's. In addition, the energy consumption of the Zeta building has been lower than that of the Alpha building every year since its construction. Given these data, plus the fact that Zeta has a stable workforce with little employee turnover, we recommend using Zeta rather than Alpha for our new building project, even though Alpha's bid promises lower construction costs."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the memo from the vice president of the company, it is recommended that building constructions should be otherwise given to zeta constructions company and the reason for this is because it is perceived to have a stable workforce and that it cost less to maintain the buildings constructed zeta company. This argument is therefore flawed for this three reasons.
First of all, since the two new buildings are based in different, lets say zeta construction has its building located in a densely populated region and Alpha construction has its own building in an over populated area. or let's say Zeta building has its project built in a rural area while Alpha has its own in an urban Centre. The argument is weakened due to the fact that the region in which the buildings are not considered before taking the decision to award further project to Zeta construction company when it might have been economical to award it to Alpha construction company. For example, the cost of maintaining buildings in Ekiti state will be considerably lower than buildings in Lagos state, Nigeria
Secondly, having a stable workforce doesn't prove an indication that quality job will be delivered or that the job will be completed on time by Zeta construction company. Construction works does not necessarily need stable work force especially when it it has to do with manual labor. its mostly abundant and easily sourced especially when a big project is ongoing. For example, a company embarking on a construction work can easily source for labor within the local community which will not only reduce employment among the local but will make the project touch the lives of the local directly by providing a source of livelihood form them.
Lastly, what if the the overall cost of giving the project to Alpha construction is cost effective than Zeta construction? it is possible that the overall cost analysis of giving the construction work to Alpha construction could be way cheaper and cost effective than giving it to Zeta construction. we can't conclude so fast because it cost cheaper to maintain a building by Zeta construction. The overall cost of having those buildings might be economical with using Alpha construction company.
In conclusion, the argument to give the construction work to Zeta construction does not hold true except it can provide answers to the three questions above and provide more evidence.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1979 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.824 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.296 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.677 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03007518797 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87760338694 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446115288221 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.2339126529 57.8364921388 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.357142857 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246954343025 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929707946411 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750964843019 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144487455469 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772128460922 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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