The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where consumption of the plant beneficia is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of beneficia can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of nutritional supplements derived from beneficia. We predict this will dramatically reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While it might be true that consumption of the plant beneficia is going to prevent colds; however, the author's argument does not make a cogent sense. It is easy to understand that colds might be the most reason for schools and workplaces absenteeism, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions therefor, not strong enough to recommend the daily use of beneficia supplement.
The author mentions that a study report shows that doctor' visits for cold treatment are only once or twice per year in nearby East Meria. However, the author does not provide further information to prove the assumption. There are other ways than visiting doctor to treat colds. For example, a person who gets minor cold can use home remedy such as honey-lemon tea to treat her cold. On the other hand, most people do not go to a doctor for cold treatment unless if it is a severe cold. Moreover, the author compares two different regions and expect to get a same result which does not make sense. For sure, there are differences between East and West Meria which is an important factor to be addressed. To strengthen his/her suggestion, the author needs investigations about total population of West and East Meria and their lifestyles such as exercise plan and eating habits.
Additionally, the author implies that colds are the main reason for schools and workplaces absenteeism, but the author does not provide any information to prove the assumption. There are other reasons for absents at work or school. Imagine a student who did not have enough time to finish her homework. As a result, she is scared to go to school because she does not want be embarrassed in front of her classmates and teacher. On the other hand, some employees are overwhelmed with their job duties, so they just call sick to have a day off for relaxation.
The author recommends that if students and employees take nutritional supplements containing beneficia, they can prevent colds. Consequently, significant reduction of absenteeism will happen. However, there is no data about beneficia supplement efficiency.
This suggestion is persuasive when the author gathers information about differences of West and East Meria population, efficiency of beneficia supplement for cold prevention, and the main reason for absenteeism. After answering these questions, the author can make such a conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...is going to prevent colds; however, the authors argument does not make a cogent sense. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, then, while, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10051546392 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84139286116 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525773195876 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0574420042 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.95 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0964665580254 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032637866152 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433097101082 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0516302355736 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278570934506 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...is going to prevent colds; however, the authors argument does not make a cogent sense. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, then, while, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 388.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10051546392 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84139286116 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525773195876 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0574420042 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.95 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0964665580254 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032637866152 0.0743258471296 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433097101082 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0516302355736 0.128457276422 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278570934506 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.