The following statement appeared in a consumer magazine:
A fear of crime has led many homeowners to purchase monitored burglar alarm
systems, but these people are wasting their money. The primary benefit of any
burglar alarm system is one of deterrence, and this effect can be achieved just as well
by having a sign in front of the house suggesting that the house is equipped with an
alarm, whether or not the alarm system is monitored or even exists. Moreover, if a
sign fails to deter burglars from entering a house, there is very little chance that the
guards who monitor the alarm system will arrive at the home in time to catch the
burglars, since the burglars will surely leave as soon as the alarm sounds. Therefore,
while it makes sense to have a sign suggesting that a house has a monitored alarm,
and it may make sense to have an audible alarm, there is no reason to pay the high
monthly fee for a monitored system.
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion, be sure to
analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example,
you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and
what alternative examples or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You
can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument,
what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if
anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
The argument claims that it is not beneficial for homeowners to pay the high montly fee for monitored burglar alarm systems just for deterrence of burglars. However, the author's argument has some flaws.
The first argument reveals that even without having any alarm system, if the house will be signed with any information suggesting that house is equiped with an alarm, it will deter burglars. This argument is not totally correct.Statistics shows that many crimes are made by the burglars who knew enough about the house that they are going to thief. Burglars are risking their freedom by making a crime, so they are not fool to break into he house without any information about that house, so if there is a misleading sign suggesting that house is equipped by te alarm, the burglar will probably know about it. These signs of course will not deter burglars from making a crime.
The second argument claims that there is a little chance for guards to arrive the house in time in order to catch the burglars. However, this argument also doesn't tell us the whole story. Even if the guards have a little chance for arriving in time, the monitors will save videos of the crime. So, at least the homeowner and guards will know who has made a crime. It will make cops work more easier to catch these burglars also the frightened burglars run away.
For my opinion, paying high monthly fee for monitored system does worth it because it will guarantee the homeowner's safety. The crime can damage person not only physically but also morally. So, it does't matter how expensive the safety systems cost because the only state of being hurt by the crime is worse.
In conclusion, the author's claims about the unnecessity of payig high cost for monitored systems are proved by unsufficient evidences. The above given examples can totally weaken those arguments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...or deterrence of burglars. However, the authors argument has some flaws. The first arg...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
...s. This argument is not totally correct.Statistics shows that many crimes are made by the ...
Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: HE_THE
Message: Did you mean 'into the house'?
Suggestion: into the house
... a crime, so they are not fool to break into he house without any information about that hous...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...e burglars. However, this argument also doesnt tell us the whole story. Even if the gu...
Line 3, column 387, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
...as made a crime. It will make cops work more easier to catch these burglars also the fright...
Line 4, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
...he frightened burglars run away. For my opinion, paying high monthly fee for mon...
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'it the doest'.
Suggestion: it the doest
...t only physically but also morally. So, it doest matter how expensive the safety systems...
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'at least', 'in conclusion', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234104046243 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.164739884393 0.15541462614 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0838150289017 0.0836205057962 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0751445086705 0.0520304965353 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0375722543353 0.0272364105082 138% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.132947976879 0.125424944231 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0520231213873 0.0416121511921 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42880509333 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0173410404624 0.026700313972 65% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.121387283237 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.028901734104 0.0255425247493 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0115606936416 0.0127820249294 90% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1850.0 2731.13054187 68% => OK
No of words: 318.0 446.07635468 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81761006289 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.57801047555 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339622641509 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.207547169811 0.287650121315 72% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14465408805 0.208842608468 69% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0817610062893 0.135150697306 60% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42880509333 2.79052419416 87% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512578616352 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 52.5083943172 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 19.875 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4425025928 57.7814097925 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.625 141.986410481 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.724660767414 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.6297169811 51.9672348444 78% => OK
Elegance: 1.51041666667 1.8405768891 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305375697874 0.441005458295 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104459355007 0.135418324435 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0924328546253 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586360851484 0.58762219726 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166249210592 0.147661913831 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126777259772 0.193483328276 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531635509746 0.0970749176394 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297491588742 0.42659136922 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0372479755306 0.0774707102158 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204113381407 0.312017818177 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234636597625 0.0698173142475 34% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.