The author asserts that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in Sunnyside Towers complex to increase their profits dramatically based on the experience of the restriction maximum water flow of the first three buildings. However, this argument relies on numerous unverified assumptions thus more evidence about this conclusion is necessary to evaluate the claim.
Firstly, the author does not have the data of actual readings of water usage before and after the restriction had been applied even if it is essential information for deciding whether it is better to extend the same restrictions to other buildings or not. If adjustment does not affect the amount of water usage of the first three buildings, there would be no profit in changing the policy of water usage and there would be no ground. Thus, data related to water usage is necessary to approve the author’s claim.
Furthermore, the author judges based on feedback which was just collected for a month. Because of the seasonal or climate properties, the observation of just a month is too short to gauge whether there are no enormous complaints or not. To be a more convincing argument, the author has to make an observation based on at least one year watching to figure out how tenants respond to this newly adopted showerhead. Also, to survey them might be better evidence for their decision if it is possible. Accordingly, it is indispensable to ask the author to provide more continuous feedback and responses of tenants of the first three buildings.
Lastly, the author assumes that the first three buildings and other nine buildings have the same characteristics whereas the evidence of the usage of the buildings is not provided. Even if the newly adopted policy is adequate for the first three buildings and it might lead to the company’s increased profits, there is no guarantee that the same policy would be substantial to other buildings. Other buildings may be used to hair salons or gyms where water usage is above the average buildings, there would be fury and angry respondence of tenants of the building and in the worst case there will leave the Sunnyside Towers Complex and thus would reduce the profits of the company drastically. Thus questions related to the characteristics of all buildings are essential to pass judgment of the author’s claim.
In sum, the author does not have enough evidence to decide the modification of their policy of water usage. Thus the questions pertaining to usage differences of before and after adoption, continuous feedbacks related showerheads, and comparability of all buildings should be answered to support or weaken the author’s claims.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2220 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.034 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.77 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.931 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ication of their policy of water usage. Thus the questions pertaining to usage diffe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, may, so, thus, whereas, as to, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14512471655 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86165823956 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439909297052 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2078407862 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.8125 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5625 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358138656433 0.218282227539 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110505613711 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946880632513 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201910248485 0.128457276422 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796406812015 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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