"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
In the argument, the author is depicting the contrast of the money spent on the funds for public schools of two different cities - Parson and Blue which belong to the same region Trillura. The statement further states that even though both as the proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson city had been recently spending twice as much per year as Blue city spends for its public schools. Therefore, the author has concluded his statement that Parson city gives more attention to provide better education than Blue residents. Yet there are certain flaws and schisms in the statement that are not completely mentioned by the author which makes it difficult to end the note in the favor of the author.
Firstly, the author has not mentioned about how the rest of the tax was contributed towards the betterment of the residents. Also, the author has also failed to mention any data of previous years. There can be a possibility that prior to recent years Blue city had contributed towards its public schools and the results of the students might have inclined. As we do not know anything about the previous years segregation of the tax between the two cities it is hard to conclude whether which city contribute more towards the education sector.
Secondly, the author has not presented any information regarding the distribution of the population between the two cities. If the ratio of students in Blue City is less than in the comparison to that of Parson city then it is viable enough to understand the tax distribution in the Blue City. It can also be assumed that the quality of education was declining in Parson City hence, more bent in the eduction sector.
Thirdly, the implicit factors that contribute towards the education sector are not discussed by the author. There is no information regarding the connectivity of the roads and highways that would increase the admits of non-residents admits in the school. One assumption can be made that the rents and connectivity of the Blue City is not good as that of Parson City and hence the foreign students were coming in the Parson city for education. This can also lead to the reason of why more money was being spent in the education sector in Parson City.
Lastly, I would like to end my note by concluding that based on the facts and information provided by the author it is arduous to assume whether Parson City place a higher value on education or not. The argument can be easily twisted in the favor of Blue city residents and other factors too.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.697 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.501 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.92 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...do not know anything about the previous years segregation of the tax between the two ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the population between the two cities. If the ratio of students in Blue City is l...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79498861048 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55351706087 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441913439636 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9655944763 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.823529412 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8235294118 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248160716678 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861000713496 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813271365274 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148992324546 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452870255832 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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