Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesses.
In the given argument, it is stated that by emulating the eating habits of ancient people(hominids), we can cure many chronic illnesses. This conclusion has been stated based on the evidence, that our body has been evolved to eat these types of foods and these foods are filled with health promoting nutrients which when consumed improves the body's immunity against metabollic and inflammatory diseases. However, before these recomendations can be evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, are our current physical energy expension same as that of the early humans? there is a possibility the hominids's average energy expension is more than the current people's average expension, perhaps this vast energy expended by those hominids required more enrgy and nutrient rich foods like bone broth. Since, our enrgy expension is possible low, maybe we dont need the same food they consumed. if the above scenario holds merit, then conclusion of the original statement is weakened.
Secondly, are the people who have consumed these foods and have had no change in their metabolic and inflammatory diseases ? it is possible that there are people whose metabolic illness cant be cured just by taking these foods, or maybe, these foods just dont have any effect on their diseases. in an ideal world, even if we can believe to cure several chronic diseases through food, we cant confirm that all the people who consume these particular foods are cured of their illness. if the above is true, then the argument doesn't hold water.
Finally, were hominids who consumed these foods, didnt have any metabollic illness or inflammatory diseases? - perhaps it is possible that eventhough the hominids consumed these nutrient rich foods, they were susceptible to the mentioned diseases. Maybe, they had consumed other foods or herbs with these foods for medicinal purposes that have not been known to us. until these can be completely known, the recommandation made in the argument is crippled.
In conclusion, the argument, as it satnds now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study) then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the recommendation to consume foods like the early hominids did.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1941 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.042 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.885 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19791666667 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69403645577 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513020833333 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4927229419 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.411764706 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194245830541 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594471925756 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421705484663 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105626835965 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328737070519 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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