A pet food company recalled 4 million pounds of pet food in response to complaints that pets that had consumed the food experienced vomiting, lethargy, and other signs of illness. After the recall, the pet food company tested samples from the recalled food and determined that all chemicals found in the food were chemicals that are approved for use in pet food. Thus, the recalled food was not responsible for these symptoms, and the company should not devote further resources to the investigation.
Pets are generally cute, little, honest and loving animals which are loved by people as well and often people treat these animals as their own children. People do really care about the health of these pets. No one can take the health of their pets for granted. As mentioned in argument, pets that had consumed the pet food are experiencing various types of sickness like vomiting, lethargy etc. which will obviously worry their owners.
According to argument, the pets that consumed the pet food showed some signs of sickness. However, no information regarding the usage of pet food per meal is available. Also, there is no information about the type of pets that showed the signs of sickness. It might be possible that the food is good for only a certain type of animals or vice versa.
Moreover, the samples of pet food tested contains only chemicals that are approved, but the quantity and proportion of these chemicals is also required to in definite amount. No random mixture of allowed chemicals will make the food appropriate for all animals.
Therefore, the company needs to investigate more to know if the amount of chemicals used are in the right proportion, which type of pets should be allowed to have the pet food, what should be the maximum limit of the food for one meal. Only after testing all these things, company should stop further investigation but they should try to find out the proper reason behind the pets falling sick, once they know the answers and are assured, they should stop the investigation.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 262 350
No. of Characters: 1234 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.023 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.71 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.349 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 2260.96107784 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 262.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86641221374 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46179655575 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534351145038 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 393.3 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3656618413 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0769230769 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386006880376 0.218282227539 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148474811023 0.0743258471296 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117811202056 0.0701772020484 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236527489079 0.128457276422 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526640867773 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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