The president of GC(Grove College) recommends the college to drop the tradition as a all-female institute and begin enrolling male students. To support his claim, he cited the examples of other all-female colleges, indicating that their application and enrollment tremendously rose after the adoption of coeducation. Although the evidence seems concinving, careful examination reveals that several critical questions must be addressed before we can reach his conclusion that enrollment of Grove College would also increase after adopting the policy.
Firstly, there might be no consequential relationship between the quit of all-female tradition and the rise in application and enrollment in the all-female colleges cited by the president. Although the increase might occur just after the drop of the policy, it's entirely possible that it was other reasons that led to the result. For instance, those colleges might have introduced some renowned lecturers as well as courses to consolidate their lesson quality. Chances also exist that there have been great amount of investment on various research projects in those colleges recent years, attracting more students to participate in. Moreover, those colleges could be expanding their enrollment with lower standards. Thus it's difficult to convince us that it's the adoption of coeducation policy that made the major contribution to the increase in applicaiton and enrollment in those colleges.
Secondly, the adoption of coeducaiton policy might not perform satisfactory functions even though introduced to Grove College. It is implied by the president by citing the cases of other colleges' coeducaiton that the policy would also succeed in GC, which require the conditions of GC and the other colleges should be at similar level. However, it's possible that GC locates in the countryside far away from the nearest city whilist other colleges are in downtowns of large cities, making GC less appealing to young students. Research equipments of other colleges might be far more advanced than those in GC. It's also likely that there are few big companies near GC, leading to the employment after graduation much tougher than that of other colleges, which might be in the neighborhood of large companies. Without considering and ruling out these factors, it's too early to make the prediction that the coeducation policy in GC would succeed in attracting application.
Finally, the director of alumnae association argues the all-female education is the necessary feature of the college, citing surveys of incoming students and Grove alumnae, in which all-female status is strongly recommended, as evidence. However, questions about whether these surveys are effective evidence must also be put forward. As most surveys are voluntary, the interviewees tend to be those interested in the subject. Thus the respondents might be only a tiny part of the whole general, in which case the survey result cannot represent the general situation. Questions on the surveys could also be specially designed so as to guide the respondents to support the all-female policy. In such cases, the general attitude of current students and alumnae could not be effectively garnered. Before providing satisfactory answers to these questions, the effectiveness of the survey results cited by the director could not be taken as useful evidence.
In summary, several essential questions must be addressed before accepting the conclusion that enrollment of GC would rise after adopting the coeducation policy. To bolster the conclusion, detailed comparison of GC and those colleges which have adopted the policy as well as cogent evidence on the effectiveness of the surveys cited by the director should be provided.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK but partly
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flaws:
It is out of topic. for this topic, we need to argue against the director, not the president.
argument 1:
all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college,
argument 2:
the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove.
argument 3:
The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 577 350
No. of Characters: 3108 1500
No. of Different Words: 254 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.901 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.386 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.838 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 239 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 206 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 150 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 94 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.042 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.168 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 82, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ds the college to drop the tradition as a all-female institute and begin enrollin...
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Line 3, column 717, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... their enrollment with lower standards. Thus its difficult to convince us that its t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... Thus its difficult to convince us that its the adoption of coeducation policy that...
^^^
Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... to be those interested in the subject. Thus the respondents might be only a tiny pa...
^^^^
Line 7, column 626, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...urveys could also be specially designed so as to guide the respondents to support the al...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as to, for instance, in summary, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 55.5748502994 149% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3168.0 2260.96107784 140% => OK
No of words: 577.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49046793761 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90110439584 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91278448778 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459272097054 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 996.3 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5297770224 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0416666667 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299832734758 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942534839162 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949229969277 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188581302452 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107638619401 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 98.500998004 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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