A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It is argued that the new Captain Seafood restaurant which specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable. This conclusion is reached based on studies that show increment in the consumption of seafood dishes in the Bay City restaurants and a decrement in eating home-cooked meals by the two-income families, who are the majority in the area, and the fact that there are no seafood specializing restaurants in the area at present. However, to evaluate if the argument holds ground, three evidences are required.
Firstly, what is the evidence that the two-income families eating less home-cooked food eat more seafood? The mentioned study says these families eat less home-cooked food. This can be good enough to say that they eat more restaurant food, but this doesn’t have to mean they eat more seafoods in the restaurants when they don’t eat home-cooked food. Perhaps, they eat more vegetables or fast food. If evidence is found that these majority two-income families don’t actually eat more seafood than the conclusion drawn in the original argument is undermined.
Secondly, evidences are required to proof that seafood is healthy. The study mentioned says that majority of the families in the area are two-income families who are also very conscious about healthy eating. There is no evidence provided to prove that seafoods are healthy for people. On the contrary, one can argue that, seafoods actually aren’t really healthy food choice especially for people with high blood pressure, people who work in a stressed condition. Seafoods are known to contain cholesterol and unsaturated fats which are not really the ingredients one looks for in healthy food. If there are evidences to prove that seafoods are not healthy, then the argument presented is severely weakened.
Moreover, there is know evidence to maintain that, people who currently eat seafood in the established restaurants, will enjoy seafood in a new specialized restaurant. Success of a restaurant doesn’t depend only on the menu card. If the restaurant fails to prepare the seafood in ways palatable to the locals, it’s seafood rich menu card alone can’t keep it open for long. Without evidences of good cook, affordable price, preferably lower than the existing seafood offering restaurants, the argument presented is smothered with question marks.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now doesn’t hold much ground because of its reliance on unsubstantiated assumptions. If the author can provide more evidences based on more methodical research, it would be possible to evaluate the viability of the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2140 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.083 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.166 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.33 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... they eat more vegetables or fast food. If evidence is found that these majority t...
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Line 2, column 425, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this majority' or 'these majorities'?
Suggestion: this majority; these majorities
...or fast food. If evidence is found that these majority two-income families don’t actually eat ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 20, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...severely weakened. Moreover, there is know evidence to maintain that, people who c...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33012048193 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83103920626 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481927710843 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0735174599 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.6 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200898852763 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685275323044 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655296612737 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12423465551 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0944489556959 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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