A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following paragraph written by the author suggests, the opening of the new restaurant Captain Seafood that specializes in seafood that should be quite popular and profitable in Bay City. Although the argument looks convincing at first glance it lacks to a certain degree when it comes to evidence required to support the author's claim.
The author has mentioned a sales study of restaurants in Bay City indicating a growth in consumption of seafood dishes however, the specifications of the study are not stated like :What products was the sales study done on?, How many of the products were seafoods? and so on. Author has also not stated the amount of seafood consumption before these five years due to the fact that if the number was actually minute to begin with, a 30 percent growth will not affect the restaurants at all hence not supporting the authors claim .The factor of increase of tourism in the Bay City, its Cultural influences is also not specified.
The author lacks to provide the information regarding how many families in the Bay City are two-income families therefore not giving a clarity on the issue. According to the studies two-income families tend to eat less home cooked meals while expressing concern for healthy eating but this statement does not fully highlight the issue as healthy eating can be both maintained by eating in restaurants and the most important of all without eating seafood. There is a mention of a nationwide study in the argument however the claim made by the author is regarding the Bay City therefore making the study too generalized to base any conclusion on.
Hence although at first glance the author's argument might seem convincing it is rife with holes and needs more specific and detailed evidence and study about the consumption of seafood in the Bay City, and if opening the Captain seafood restaurant with be popular and profitable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1558 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.884 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.649 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.272 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.465 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.729 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ite popular and profitable in Bay City. Although the argument looks convincing at first ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...How many of the products were seafoods? and so on. Author has also not stated the a...
^^^
Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...l hence not supporting the authors claim .The factor of increase of tourism in the...
^^
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...hence not supporting the authors claim .The factor of increase of tourism in the Ba...
^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...neralized to base any conclusion on. Hence although at first glance the authors ar...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
.... Hence although at first glance the authors argument might seem convincing it is ri...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 319.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97178683386 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65675784386 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514106583072 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.8726006508 57.8364921388 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.222222222 119.503703932 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4444444444 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 5.70786347227 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280761151114 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111745079445 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.092573352735 0.0701772020484 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171057029483 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083914531323 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.3799401198 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.3550499002 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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